Week 3 Entry for brigits_flame. Prompt: "Truth."

[intermezzo_poet]

So this is technically part of a short story... and I wrestled with the idea of explaining the characters, the situation, etc, etc... and found it not only too painstaking, but it just sounded bad. So, I apologize if this is confusing, and you can make of it what you will. I hope you like this piece, anyway, and good luck, everyone!

Comments

[innana88]

I'm doing some catch-up reading. The holidays were madness and I wasn't able to take the time to comment on the entries as I read them.

I really enjoyed the dialogue in this piece. I have to admit that it made me smile. My first cigarette was a clove. I wish I would have coughed. Maybe I wouldn't have kept it up for eleven years. :)

I thought that perhaps instead of saying "sugar cube" you could have just said that the filter was sweetened or sugar-tipped. And "cloying" is, I agree, a perfect word. ;)

You write some excellent stuff. I look forward to reading your pieces.

[intermezzo_poet]

Yeah, I didn't know the word for it--thanks for the help, there. :)

Thank you so much for the comment--I really, really appreciate it!