Brigits_Flame entry for Jan, Week 1, Angels.

[intermezzo_poet]

            “Taking another break?” Lowe asks as I enter the trailer. I close the door behind me, deliberately, carefully, making sure every ounce of that Arizona heat is left beyond the doors.

I flash him a weary smile, slide into a seat across from him, and watch as he swirls the water in his glass. “I see you’re working hard.”

Comments

[watchclarewrite]

Oh my god this is so BEAUTIFUL. I love the tense you've chosen for this, which keeps the reader firmly in the present as the narrator discovers things. It's a great feeling of the story taking you along for a ride. So well done.

[intermezzo_poet]

Aww! Thank you so much! And I'm glad you like the present tense thing... it was completely last-minute, so I'm sure I left a lot of accidental past-tenses in there. :P

Oh, well.

Thank you, again! :)

[merthin]

Wow. Well worth the read. The MC's emotions are so real and tangible. I'd wish you luck, but I don't think you need it this week. ;-)

[intermezzo_poet]

Haha... thanks. I'm glad you liked it! :)

[andersenmom]

That was great! What an cool way to interpret the prompt.

[intermezzo_poet]

Thanks! :)

(By the way, your userpic/icon/etc is awesome. :P)

[lilcougar]

great job. i can see you tying in the next prompt to this one. can't wait! :)

[intermezzo_poet]

Thanks for the comment! I appreciate it. :)

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