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invisibletosee

CHAPTER THIRTY FIVE

Dec 29, 2003 20:08

Harry squeezed him tightly and Draco winced in his arms. ( Read more... )

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ex_ajhalluk585 December 30 2003, 20:24:52 UTC

The world was a million million interlocking patterns, and suddenly Harry knew how to shift them subtly to change the way they worked. He stretched out, and felt the minds and hearts of the Muggles in the nearby towns, and in the cities beyond. He stretched further, and found Hogwarts; one swift flex of his thoughts and every mirror in the building shattered. Better safe than sorry, Harry told himself, and smiled. There would be no attack on Hogwarts this dawn or any other. He stretched his mind further still, beyond the bounds of this world and into the other place where Voldemort had built his lair, and he shattered all the mirrors there. In the void between worlds, Voldemort's scream of wrath rang out, and Harry knew he had been seen and known. Voldemort's mind brushed his, and the contact was like the skittering brush of cockroaches crawling over a sleeper's face. Harry was revolted, but not afraid.

Oh, yesWow ( ... )

Imperius/Cruciatus xlove December 30 2003, 23:00:46 UTC

First off, let me tell you that I absolutely adore this story. I'm having difficulty stopping in order to get on with certain responsibilities, all of which seem unimportant in comparison.

I just wanted to make a comment on your usage of the Imperius and Cruciatus curses. If I recall correctly, the words to cast the curses are different from the name of the curses themselves. So far, you have used Crucio as both the word and the name of Cruciatus. Also, when Harry casts Imperius, he should be saying 'Imperio', not 'Imperius'.

Otherwise, fantastic story.

Re: Imperius/Cruciatus invisibletosee December 31 2003, 01:06:29 UTC

Oh BLESS you for that. Yes, you're right. I'll go poke the text with a stick.

Re: Imperius/Cruciatus anna_blue December 31 2003, 23:19:40 UTC

While you're poking, I might point out that when spells are spoke in canon, they are italicised. I'm not sure why this is, but there you have it.

Lovely, lovely fic. Fabulous burglar alarms.

"I'm not a complete idiot, you know."

"Which part is missing?" Draco asked. He was, Harry could see, doing his damnedest to be his usual self.

"My patience," snapped Harry.

And the above has to be my favorite part about this chapter.

Re: Imperius/Cruciatus invisibletosee January 1 2004, 10:28:43 UTC

Do you know, I'd absolutely not registered that spells were usually written in italics. Hmm. Will try to sort that out too.

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not_vacillating December 31 2003, 16:57:37 UTC

Spelling: Dumbledore's masterlhy technique

automatic port key thing-- Portkey?

And you're still killing me. I'm glad Harry did go and rescue Draco, of course-- but the power Harry's found, and he's trying to comfort Draco and he needs that returned, and oh... *hugs them both*

arcly January 3 2004, 04:09:09 UTC

The world was a million million interlocking patterns...

Brilliant stuff. It's 4am here, and I've been up for hours reading this now. I don't read much fic these days: when I come across something like this, it makes me remember why I still bother. Thanks for a cracking rollercoaster of a story. Can't wait to see what happens.

invisibletosee January 3 2004, 10:53:37 UTC

Thank YOU! Hope you enjoy the ending!

fevvy January 6 2004, 23:33:41 UTC

"That's an interesting decision," said Draco shakily.

*grins*
*loffs*