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Out Here in the Ether

Apr 07, 2009 09:50

Title: Out Here in the Ether
Author: rgcraeg
Rating: PG
Warning/Spoilers: none
Prompt(s): Ingrid Michaelson - Breakable - lyrics: and we are so fragile, and our cracking bones make noise. We are just, breakable, girls and boys...
Summary: "Have you ever thought about what protects our hearts? Just a cage of rib bones and other various parts."

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Comments 14

nandamai April 7 2009, 15:11:57 UTC

You've made my head hurt in sympathy. That's a good thing.

I really like the descriptions, especially this: one of the few things in her life that didn't smell like the Air Force.

rgcraeg April 22 2009, 23:18:34 UTC

Hah, guess I should add a warning in there: may require Advil.

When I was a freshman in college, me and a friend took some ROTC classes and all the gear smelled like a musty basement. I'm sure after being in the military for as long as Sam has that the smells just become a part of everyday life, but it's a very unique smell and I could just imagine everything on that base smelling like the AF.

Thanks for reading!

supplyship April 10 2009, 21:10:10 UTC

Hmm, interesting! And ouchie - poor Sam! I really liked the last section, with Jack knowing from experience how she's feeling. I was a tiny bit confused about her injury and the timeframe - or was it multiple injuries?

rgcraeg April 22 2009, 23:23:01 UTC

Yeah, I think they've been kicked around so much that Jack knows exactly what Sam was going through.

As for the timeframe, yeah, sorry that wasn't so clear; it was several missions in a row that she was knocked unconscious. My bad.

Thanks!

holdouttrout April 10 2009, 21:43:39 UTC

Ouch. I really like this, and I can really feel the weight pressing into my skull. I'm gonna need some fresh air myself. I love the way Jack's always there for her to lean on here, without being obvious about it.

rgcraeg April 22 2009, 23:25:40 UTC

Oh Jack, you can hold me up any day...wait, did I say that out loud?

Go, get some air, come back, and I'll give you some pills.

I'm glad you enjoyed it.

sg_betty April 14 2009, 16:37:25 UTC

Ow! Poor Sam. That was a rough one love your use of language, Sam's disjointed POV, and the way having her team to lean on gets her through.

rgcraeg April 22 2009, 23:27:04 UTC

Thanks so much for saying so! Who else could she count on if not her team?

rachel500 April 17 2009, 09:31:33 UTC

It has a wonderful disorienting quality in the way that you've written it so the reader *feels* as unsteady as Sam. Nicely done. :)

rgcraeg April 22 2009, 23:27:50 UTC

Thank you! I'm glad you liked it.