Translations in B Minor

[jacobella41]

I still feel this is unfinished and I'm not crazy about the title. But if I don't post it today, I will hurt a kitten.

Title: Translations in B Minor
Character(s)/Pairing(s): Dan/Blair, brief mentions of GG cast
Rating: Harmless
Words: 1,022
Warnings: None, but possibly takes place during the summer before college. Unbetta’d. Mistakes all mine.

Comments

[7gifts]

Sweet. It seemed to me like there were a lot unsaid, I'm guessing you left in these gaps intentionally to stir our imaginative juices.

I enjoyed the last paragraph especially, liked the way you described their final encounter in this fic:

Hand on small hip, mouth against hers, palm on her face, connecting at the chest, hips, and knees. And she doesn’t laugh when they break apart. She tries to make a sly insult but he swallows it as he does her protest.

[jacobella41]

yeah, everything i write is pretty sparse and light on dialogue. but i'm trying out different styles. feedback is awesome for figuring out what works though! so let me know! :)

one of these days i may start with them already together so i can finally get to write in some sexy time ;)

[7gifts]

Yeah, everything i write is pretty sparse and light on dialogue. Ahh I see. I'm detail junkie, who tends to like detail not necessarily in dialogue just in general (albeit prose or whatever style) as it helps me understand what the writer is trying to (or not trying to) convey.

Whatever style you decide to go with is cool, imho writing is all about experimentation.

Starting a fic with Dair already together sounds and would be interesting to read especially as most fics in fandom tend to start with their initial courtship.

PS: I appreciate constructive feedback as well, it helps my writing tremendously.

[jacobella41]

:)
thanks

[jacobella41]

thank you!

[underhand_glory]

This is great. I love Blair's rant about espadrilles and her calling Dan on his prejudice about wealth.

[jacobella41]

haha. i'm biased. i'm not a fan of espadrilles. and thank you!

[jacobella41]

hands down, best feedback! thanks so much!
last time i wrote them, it was just them, so i was a bit nervous about trying to include other characters, i'm glad it went off nicely though.
and dan's has had more than a few charlie chaplin moments :)

[mcclumps]

Awesome, how come I always feel that i've come to the conclusion that Dair fic writers are the best, IMO quality> quantity, and wasn't it just awesome what Dan said near the end there in the finale, that he will mis Blair, Blair f'n Waldorf of all people.

Sure he said that about Chuck Bass as well, but still, as a Dair fans, it probably means more than it does to others. :P

[jacobella41]

oh dair was all over that finale! with blair telling him off once and for all and the future sister in laws bonding (gotta say blair/jenny was probably my favorite part) and him saying he misses her AND i believe she was the first one he mentionedl! c'mon!! ;)