PAY NO ATTENTION TO THE MAN BEHIND THE CURTAIN!!kerrysonDecember 31 2005, 14:21:35 UTC
Now, I'm just guessing here but my ego makes me look like I know what I'm talking about...
From what I remembered of it, your writing has improved! Huzzah!
"a man covered in snow" I really like that. I find writing to be more successful if you're able to describe and have that explanation carry a message on it's own.
Second, Descriptions not adjectives dammit!!
Did not see the guy dying. Nope. Not at all.
Where is my hat!!?
It feels icky whenever "what seems to be" is used in writing. You're the story teller, tell us what is happening. Do we turn left or right!!?
And lastly, NOOOOO!!! Never show unfinished work. It'll never get done!! Wait until you have the beginning half of your story finished. Then the rest can write itself.
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From what I remembered of it, your writing has improved! Huzzah!
"a man covered in snow" I really like that. I find writing to be more successful if you're able to describe and have that explanation carry a message on it's own.
Second, Descriptions not adjectives dammit!!
Did not see the guy dying. Nope. Not at all.
Where is my hat!!?
It feels icky whenever "what seems to be" is used in writing. You're the story teller, tell us what is happening. Do we turn left or right!!?
And lastly, NOOOOO!!! Never show unfinished work. It'll never get done!! Wait until you have the beginning half of your story finished. Then the rest can write itself.
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