The Truth I Chose for You

[jbs_teeth]

Title: The Truth I Chose for You
Author: jbs_teeth
Rating: R
Genre: Romance
Summary: "When he kisses Ianto for the first time, Jack knows he's been lied to."
Notes: Post-Fragments, pre-series. No actual spoilers, per se, though probably not quite as meaningful without knowledge of "Cyberwoman" and "Fragments". Thank you very much to the extremely helpful betas

Comments

[antelope_writes]

Hurray, you posted it!

I like the ending much better, and I also like how you fleshed it out more. Still gets better the 2nd and 3rd readings. Or fourth. Or fifth. Yay.

[jbs_teeth]

When I went back to reread it, I realized how rough it really was. Thanks so much for your suggestions, they really helped me pull it through. (And I'm especially glad I ended up with the scene in the SUV; to me, it really clinches Ianto's participation in the seduction.)

Thank you!

[antelope_writes]

Always a pleasure. The SUV scene was unexpected and wonderful, and dare I say...submissive?

[kahtyasofia]

Yes! I adore this fic! This is SO going in my memories! Very lyrical in the style of writing. Highly unusual and I adore it! The metaphors are fantastic and well placed. The slow way they circle one another, observing and learning. They're quiet. The whole thing is subtext and undertone which is so how the boys are. Some of the literation is brilliant, Jack searching for Ianto's secret in the air that drifts behind his departure like a jetstream....that's bloody brilliant!

Forget the fact that it's hot, you kept them both IC in a world of over emo OOC fics.

I tip my hat to you!

[jbs_teeth]

Thanks so much for mentioning the writing style. It's one that requires a little bit more effort from the reader, and I'm occasionally concerned that it's too OTT in the context of sci-fi fanfic. (demotu refers to it as "risky.")

(If you like the style, you might be interested in checking out "What Happens in a Hundred Lifetimes" -- very proud of the writing there (hope it's not too tacky pimping out another fic here).)

Anyway, always pleased and proud to be recognized for writing IC (I love writing Jack; his POV is the clearest in my head) and for trumping emo!

Thank you for such a lovely comment, too. I'm so glad you enjoyed reading.

[kahtyasofia]

I think an unusual writing style suits TW well.Because it is scifi you would have to watch the pretentiousness but otherwise, it works. We also need some more well written fic. There's too much OOC trash out there and too much poorly written fluff.

Jack is my favorite POV, too. I 'hear' his voice more readily than Ianto but I've gotten good at writing Ianto recently. The trick is not to feminize him and remember he's a bloke. Less is more with Ianto and don't forget the dry wit!

Anyway, I'm hungry for well written fic so I appreciate this effort much. I don't mind you pimping fic! I'm going to go read it!

[jbs_teeth]

Do you mean that it'd be pretentious to use this style if I were writing a fic wherein Owen marries the Weevil Queen in order to prevent intergalactic incident, or that you found bits of this pretentious. I definitely would agree with the former; even though this is my regular style, I would not write this way for an episode-style piece (which I am doing now, actually).

However, if you found specific things here to be a touch pretentious, I would be obliged if you pointed them out.

Thanks again for leaving such thoughtful comments.

[christine_twfan]

Oh that was beautiful! Hot and seductive, very emotional and true to their characters. Simply fantastic.

[jbs_teeth]

I'm very relieved knowing so many people found it hot (rather than stupid -- 'cause ankles? Generally not so hot -- or too overwrought).

Thanks so much for reading, and for commenting.

[slasheuse]

Oh my god. You killed me. This is a wonderful, thoughtful fic. I wish more people put this much effort and skill into fanfic. You made me blush, reading this - the microscopic focus is wonderful. No praise is too high.

[jbs_teeth]

Hooray for my newly found super-power, killing with fic!

Srsly, thank you for recognizing the effort I put in; the choices get a little thin during the off-season, so it makes me proud to know I can help get us along until the next season rolls around.

[seether_79]

That was just wonderful. Really great writing! Loved it so much :)

[jbs_teeth]

Oh, thanks so much. Glad you enjoyed!