Comments | jenmstar: Ficlet: Jealousy (SB/OB, PG)

jenmstar

Ficlet: Jealousy (SB/OB, PG)

Apr 18, 2006 22:26

Title: Jealousy
Author: jenmstar
E-mail: jenmstar@gmail.com
Pairing: SB/OB
Rating: PG
Archive: northern_softy orlandoslash fellow_shippers bean_squee
Disclaimer: This is all fiction.
Beta: None. Please let me know if you find any mistakes.
Notes: For the 28 Character Challenge. danichatterley's pick.

( Jealousy )

orlibean, bean, ficlet, rps, orlando

Comments 17

sorchar April 18 2006, 22:41:47 UTC

This is good and I enjoyed it. But you wrote "grim" instead of "grime" in the first paragraph.

jenmstar April 18 2006, 22:47:16 UTC

Thank you. That's why I need a beta even for these short pieces...

mistry89 April 18 2006, 23:36:13 UTC

What a realistic and horrible (for Orlando - both the jealousy itself and his handling of it)little moment. Thank you.

jenmstar April 19 2006, 06:56:27 UTC

Thank you. I'm really glad you enjoyed it.

danichatterley April 18 2006, 23:55:03 UTC

Awww poor Orli. So much said with few words. Thank you so much *smooches*

jenmstar April 19 2006, 06:57:06 UTC

*blows kisses* I'm glad you liked it.

magnifica7 April 19 2006, 00:23:17 UTC

Orlando's feelings are almost tangible!

jenmstar April 19 2006, 06:57:46 UTC

What a wonderful compliment. Thank you.

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jenmstar April 19 2006, 06:58:12 UTC

Thank you. I'm glad it worked. *g*