Frozen peas and story starts

[jess_star123]

Since finishing PLPP I've been expecting to suddenly find myself awash with enthusiasm about writing a new story. Alas, alack, this does not appear to be the case. I've written so many different starts to His Saving Grace I've turned myself back round in a circle and I'm not sure which one I want to go with. Plus, I've been writing beginnings all

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Peas and Postings

[lillianagrace]

As far as the peas go, I like the smaller (I won't use baby) peas as they are sweeter; however, fear not - it is not just Australian grocery stores, we only have a small selection of peas in America as well and they rarely consist of "normal" size pease.

As for the prologue - I love it. It's interesting from the jump and the heroine seems a bit flighty and not typical of kidnapping stories. If you are able to continue and flesh out the storyline, I think that it would make a great read.

Sometimes with one shots, it's easier to pick a few random things that you have to incorporate into the story than to pick a plotline. So, my challenge to you is to write a one-shot that has the following: a red ballon, a character with a nervous habit (chewing nails, biting lip, ect), peas, a college campus, and a cheese-y pick-up line.

Of course you don't have to accept the challege, I just thought it might be a good way to start.

Lindsay

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[jess_star123]

I have a sneaking suspicion that American supermarkets would be heaps worse than Australian ones, we're pretty chilled compared to some I've seen around the world. Continental Europe wins in my opinion as they have the best range of frozen pizzas and they actually taste good.

Thanks for the nod to the prologue. I have so many different ideas of how it could go and I'd love to flesh it out some day.

Your help with the one shot has been invaluable and I have actually written a story encompassing things you suggested that I'll pop up on fp once it gets over it's little trip. You're a genius because I'm totally all fired up about writing His Saving Grace now, which was the intent behind the whole thing. Huge thanks!

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[mcm_315]

Great prologue! As one who has written a kidnap-victim-falls-for-kidnapper story, I find the whole thing an interesting plot. If that was the way you were going. I love your ability to mix humor in such a horrifying situation for the poor girl. It's a promising start and I do hope you continue with it. I also hope you get inspiration for "His Saving Grace." I remember reading what you had of that and I liked it because I liked Alex. As for one-shots, I'm not good at those. I'm way too wordy. I find something short extremely tough to write, so I can't be of help in that regard. Sorry

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[jess_star123]

Interesting, the intent behind the story won't be that the girl will fall in love with the kidnapper (although I like that idea and totally want to write one of those!), but with her bodyguard. The guy who insisted she wear running shoes at all times.

Hurrah, I have inspiration back for His Saving Grace and I thumped out a few thousand words on it this afternoon. I'm really excited with the plot shift so I hope it all works out.

I'm with you on being too wordy, but I like one shots because it sort of clears out a mental block about writing. Which has happened in this case, I wrote a quick little story and now I'm ready for His Saving Grace.

I've heard of authonomy and I'll definitely consider posting there. Thanks for the heads up and support.

p.s. Loving my peas! Peas rock!

[lalaith7]

okay, perhaps I'm the only person with this opinion but I thought the excerpt prologue thingy was a mess, the last paragraph or so was cute, but before that I was like "Where is she going with this and how is it relevant?"

As for prompts, How about a story in which the main character hates their name for whatever reason, but by the end of it they love it? Sorry that was crappy, um perhaps look up tabloid headlines and write the stories yourself or write the life stories of people in the obituaries?

Lastly, you think peas have gotten complicated, try buying baby food! All I need are a few cans of normal carrot baby food for this amazing recipe I have but no, everything is organic or semi-solid or stage 4 or whatever.

[jess_star123]

Thanks for the feedback on the prologue, I'll bear that in mind if I ever get around to fleshing it out any. Keeping things relevant is definitely not a skill or mine, I've re-read a bit of PLPP today and I just kept being like 'why did I bother mentioning that'? Oh well, you live and learn!

I sort of took part of your idea in the one shot I've ended up writing as the main character doesn't much like his last name. I adore it, however, so he doesn't get around to hating it like you suggested. I like the idea of writing the story of people in teh obituaries, I might consider that next time I have a writing block, thanks.

I'm so with you on the baby food thing. When I stayed with my sister and nephew soon after he was born I just about had a mental breakdown trying to pick some food out for him at the supermarket. He was certainly eating better than me!

Cheers, Jess

[loveheart10]

I enjoyed the prologue! I wish I could help you with a writing prompt but nothing comes to mind.. I just wanted to at least show you some feedback on what you have given us already! The female character already seems like she is going to be a trip! funny in a lightly sarcastic but also serious way...i love a personality where your in a deep situation and the only thing you can do is either attempt humor..or cry and she did both together which makes this amusing and very interesting!!

and sorry bout the frozen pea thing..lol all i know of is peas from a can! and i barely shop for those (veggies aren't my thing lol)

Good luck with finding a story you want to put your heart into! You have done great with the others...don't give up :)

LoveHeart♥ (Jasmine)

[jess_star123]

Thanks so much for the feedback. Hopefully I'll flesh out that one shot some day soon as I really like the idea. I want to write something silly where people don't react in the way they're supposed to.

Peas in a can? Yikes, I think I'll stick with the frozen ones.

Cheers for your support, I'm really grateful!

[onehugfitsall]

Oh, so that's why His Saving Grace wasn't popping up at the top of my Favorite Stories list!! Darn. Well, I'm sure whichever direction you choose to head in will be awesome. :)

The frozen peas people are trying too hard.

So, this is my favorite line in the prologue: I snorted and wished I had a mirror so I could direct my rolled eyes at myself. Hilarious. :D However, I think the girl is kind of clichedly (is that a word?) get-on-your-nerves immature.

[jess_star123]

It's all good, His Saving Grace is on it's way because I've figured out what I'm doing with it. Hopefully I'll get the first chapter out soon.

Thanks for the feedback on the prologue thing, if I ever get round to writing it I'll work on having her be less annoying!

Cheers.