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jess_star123

Frozen peas and story starts

Aug 04, 2009 10:21

Since finishing PLPP I've been expecting to suddenly find myself awash with enthusiasm about writing a new story. Alas, alack, this does not appear to be the case. I've written so many different starts to His Saving Grace I've turned myself back round in a circle and I'm not sure which one I want to go with. Plus, I've been writing beginnings all ( Read more... )

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pearl_t August 6 2009, 07:38:19 UTC

I think my favorite line was the last one, but I think that it should be a comma instead of a period after the word undone. For a while there, I wasn't sure whether Alex was cross-dressing as Marilyn Monroe or if there was a different narrator for this version. :P

Since it is your birthday month--mine too!--I've been trying to think of something to prompt your writing. How about a one-shot from a male's perspective, set in a lawyer's office, somehow involving a priest and triplets. Very random, I know. Maybe that will inspire you.

jess_star123 August 9 2009, 06:53:08 UTC

You make a good point about the last line. I'm terrible with punctuation in dialogue, I never manage to get it right!

Haha, I'm loving the idea of Alex cross-dressing as Marilyn Monroe and getting kidnapped. Unfortunately, that's not the way I've seen the story going so be prepared to see him in normal boy clothes.

Thanks so much for your writing prompt. I've incorporated it with a few prompts from other people and written a little one shot that I'll be posting on fp soon. Credit to you for the idea, I was totally inspired!

Cheers, Jess

acakeofcheese August 7 2009, 02:23:03 UTC

I can honestly that is one of the best prologues I have ever read.

I don't really have any other words which could describe how much I loved it.

jess_star123 August 9 2009, 06:53:28 UTC

Oh, bless. Thanks so much!

coffeeaddicated August 10 2009, 09:41:14 UTC

Just wanted to say that I really enjoyed that prologue. Great job!

jess_star123 August 15 2009, 22:24:10 UTC

Thanks so much!

kareena89 August 12 2009, 04:09:40 UTC

I really really like this! It has so much potential. I'd love you see where you go with it! So if you're ever inspired, I'd totally read it. I'm going to add you as a friend on livejournal if that's okay? I'm Kareena on FP. You're stories are brilliant! <3 them all
-Kara

jess_star123 August 15 2009, 22:25:31 UTC

Yeah, I think potential remains the word for that prologue. I definitely don't have plans to fatten it out just yet. Thanks, though, I'm glad you liked it. Cheers so much for saying you like my stuff!

maryam6 August 29 2009, 07:48:32 UTC

Amazing :) I enjoyed the prologue too!