Comments | jinkibumiminho: Morning Papers: 315 words; Key/Onew/Luna; R

jinkibumiminho

Morning Papers: 315 words; Key/Onew/Luna; R

Jun 23, 2011 00:53

He realized that she was new to love, naïve in every way.
Every schoolboy’s fantasy she was, that’s why he had to wait...

Why is age more than a number when it comes to love?
( Onew treasured her innocence and kept his longing to himself, until the day she looked up at him with so much adoration in her eyes that he found himself caressing her cheek. )

luna, rating: r, author: mimi_oly, !fanfic, key, onew

Comments 21

ippeun_nuna June 23 2011, 08:08:16 UTC

Spot??
Beautiful...
I needed to cry to get some personal stress out and you helped with this beauty and pureness and Jinkiness :)
Thanks as always <3

jinkibumiminho June 23 2011, 08:31:13 UTC

Oh, sweet baby! I hope you got it out of your system!
I'm glad you enjoyed the smut-less smut!

ippeun_nuna June 23 2011, 08:36:36 UTC

I am not sure if I will be able to think clearly till 27th noon, really. And if I fail (which is very realistic because of my study brain-block and not so stary evaluation of the thesis I got last night...) I dunno. Right now I am just package of stress, worry and self-doubt. I wonder where all my pride I used to have on highschool had gone...

min7girl June 23 2011, 11:11:41 UTC

So now you have to do one for Blue Light!

jinkibumiminho June 23 2011, 16:47:30 UTC

You know me so well...
Nah, I'd hate to wish the frustration that Blue Light implies on them (although it was very effective on hubby, I'm just sayin).
I think "Melt With U" would be more fun, don't you? Or maybe "Love 2 the 9's," but in my brain that's for my OnKey (don't judge, it works).

min7girl June 23 2011, 17:13:12 UTC

Love 2 the 9s I think works for Minkey, but Onkey will also be good. Continental ofcourse is Ontae! Blue Light is frustration, but that could come from busy schedules and not being able to have any proper alone time. All pairs work on that one. And then there is DamnU and Sweet Baby which I would also make ontae cause I'm like that. :) And DamnU could be a top!taemin song for Onate. ooooo, I like that!

jinkibumiminho June 23 2011, 17:16:11 UTC

Continental is without a doubt addicterated's OnTae!

Ok, you forced me...here's my wip OnKey playlist:

http://grooveshark.com/playlist/Onkey/52344255

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addicterated June 23 2011, 12:17:02 UTC

i am almost convinced to write you an onkey, just saying, and htis was sweet even though i do not buy onew/luna kthanx bai.

jinkibumiminho June 23 2011, 17:05:05 UTC

Clearly I need to take you fangirl goggle shopping!

Onew tries to keep Minho away from Luna:
http://youtu.be/hg8DQwYwkrQ

Onew acting like a 12 year old with a crush:
http://youtu.be/BaUA-wND0cU

Luna pretending to go for the pocketed chips but really looking for an excuse to hold hands in public:
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=3XT1UXyfzrs&feature=mfu_in_order&list=UL

Onew putting up a brave front, but too shy to hold her hand for long:
[fancam] http://youtu.be/bQr2YjUyVuc
[broadcast with subs] http://youtu.be/biJ3vD6LEiE

Come to the dark side! We have cookies!

imvus June 23 2011, 21:44:37 UTC

wow! this was really beautiful. I loved the way you portrayed Jinki and Luna. Even how you portrayed the relationship with him and Key ending it mutually from growth and maturity. Just beautiful.

(then another part of me is like...NOOOOOOOOOO..... not Luna, but your right if it has to be a girl and out of all the females she seems to fit the most with Jinki.)

Just lovely :)

jinkibumiminho June 23 2011, 23:13:27 UTC

Thank you! It's not my normal style, but Onew/Luna popped into my head in response to the song, plus I had this wild little thing with Key in my head, and it mutated into this!

I'm glad you enjoyed it!

imvus June 24 2011, 20:56:26 UTC

I just had to comment it again..( I do that when something stays on my mind. I really loved the whole thing but two things made my heart flutter. It was this part:

"Onew treasured her innocence and kept his longing to himself, until the day she looked up at him with so much adoration in her eyes that he found himself caressing her cheek. When she grazed her lips against his palm and breathlessly called out “Jinki,” he saw her for the first time as young woman about to bloom, ready for a lover, rather than as a girl who needed a guardian."

and the last paragraph

"He worshipped her purity until she was ready to surrender it, until she begged him to posses her. To the familiar gentleness of his hands and lips he added the long-bridled passion of his body. He showered her in profound promises of forever, and at last she blossomed beneath him. His enraptured smile was the sun to her flower, and her sated glow was his bright moon, his Luna."

It was too perfect.

jinkibumiminho June 24 2011, 21:25:35 UTC

[glomps you]
Thank you so much! I'm much more comfortable writing flat out smut (rawr!), but for them I wanted something more poetic and non-explicit. I was hoping it didn't come out corny!