Title: Forgive Me Author: mimi_oly Rating: NC-17 (for theme, explicit sexual content) Pairing/Focus: Onew/Key Squick/trigger warnings: Issues of consent and control relating to sex.
long comment is long /i regret nothingwishunewJanuary 22 2012, 09:51:39 UTC
excuse me while I flail around here for a while. holy fncking cheese balls.
poor Jinki, getting drunk and thinking he rapped Key. honestly tho, I have my money on Key being one of the stronger people in shinee, looks aside. the whole "what are you doing to me" was really good. I was all confused like, wait omg was this really a rape?
lets talk about how Hot Bossy Key is with his comanding Jinki around oh my god. i mean yeah he's the cute Umma who is thoughtful and takes care of everyone, but seriously. talk about a control Kink, cuz I think I just got one. hnnng. even the kiss! no tongue, hands in your pockets. not to quote tell me, but I'm pretty sure all thats missing is a collar and a 'good boy'.
“So we sorta … lost our virginity together,” Jinki concluded.
“Yeah,” Kibum nodded, appreciating the significance of the situation. “Cool.”
this is the best part of the whole story. its a little awkward and adorable, and they sound like slightly lost teenagers. i cant with it.
/also I love your Jonghyun. resident pervert of Shinee
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Re: long comment is long /i regret nothingjinkibumiminhoJanuary 22 2012, 21:00:05 UTC
Thanks for reading! I'm glad you liked it, because I'm sure it was your fic that put the whole issue of consent into my brain, only this time I wanted Jinki to be tortured in a much nicer fashion. Aren't they cute together on the bathroom floor? Sort of, "Wow, we really did it, didn't we?"
Thank you for the lovely comment, and for reading outside your otp preference!
Hehhhh Ok so yeah, I'm not normally a huge OnKey fan, but I love bossy Key kind of massively, and topping-from-the-bottom Key is even better. And Jinki would be that completely apologetic and horrified, and yeah, my first thought was, "If you really pushed Key, you'd have way more than just some welts, sweetie. Or rather you'd be missing some things." kekeke I love pervy!uncle!Jjong btw.
Yes, I see you understand the appeal of the "power bottom." If I say any more on this we shall venture into TMI territory.
I wanted to include all five members, because this was meant to be a "realistic" slice of life, and the thought of Jjong delivering the babies to Bible study was just too perfect to pass up. I love that you saw the whole pervy uncle bit (of course, after being the caring bro to Onew).
Thanks for taking the time to read and comment, especially since this isn't your fave otp!
sexy stuff!!! Seriously sexy stuff.and then it ends with "Love missions"!!! Wonderful!!!
And i do love this line!---
“Hide your crack pipe and your kinky Russian porn,” Jonghyun’s voice came blasting down the hallway. “I’m home and I brought the kids with me. And food!”
"Jinki’s hand found his erection; he wasn’t sure how much longer he could hold out watching the show unfolding before him. He sat entranced as Kibum’s hole sucked up another finger. It was better than he had imagined, because now he could hear the soft choked-out sounds that erupted from Kibum’s pretty, pink lips, and he could see the sweat collecting in the dips and curves of his slim, pale body." I was biting my hand in public. EVERYONE MUST THINK I'M A MANIAC. THIS STORY. FSDJF
Starving for contact, Jinki crawled up Kibum’s glistening body and brought their lips together, hungrily kissing Kibum’s greedy mouth. They found themselves frotting again while Jinki grabbed and squeezed all the fleshy places on Kibum’s body.
This is so sensual. I LOVE bossy demanding Key and equally eagar and demanding and sensual Onew. The dynamics are so beautifully sexy yet wonderfully sweet. sdfjsd I'M GOING TO GIVE UP TYPING A INTELLIGENT COHERENT COMMENT BC THESE TWO LITTLE LOVE BUNNIES SFJDLFK
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holy fncking cheese balls.
poor Jinki, getting drunk and thinking he rapped Key. honestly tho, I have my money on Key being one of the stronger people in shinee, looks aside. the whole "what are you doing to me" was really good. I was all confused like, wait omg was this really a rape?
lets talk about how Hot Bossy Key is with his comanding Jinki around oh my god. i mean yeah he's the cute Umma who is thoughtful and takes care of everyone, but seriously. talk about a control Kink, cuz I think I just got one. hnnng. even the kiss! no tongue, hands in your pockets. not to quote tell me, but I'm pretty sure all thats missing is a collar and a 'good boy'.
“So we sorta … lost our virginity together,” Jinki concluded.
“Yeah,” Kibum nodded, appreciating the significance of the situation. “Cool.”
this is the best part of the whole story. its a little awkward and adorable, and they sound like slightly lost teenagers. i cant with it.
/also I love your Jonghyun. resident pervert of Shinee
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I'm glad you liked it, because I'm sure it was your fic that put the whole issue of consent into my brain, only this time I wanted Jinki to be tortured in a much nicer fashion.
Aren't they cute together on the bathroom floor? Sort of, "Wow, we really did it, didn't we?"
Thank you for the lovely comment, and for reading outside your otp preference!
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I wanted to include all five members, because this was meant to be a "realistic" slice of life, and the thought of Jjong delivering the babies to Bible study was just too perfect to pass up. I love that you saw the whole pervy uncle bit (of course, after being the caring bro to Onew).
Thanks for taking the time to read and comment, especially since this isn't your fave otp!
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And i do love this line!---
“Hide your crack pipe and your kinky Russian porn,” Jonghyun’s voice came blasting down the hallway. “I’m home and I brought the kids with me. And food!”
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I'm glad you liked it! I appreciate that you read outside your otp, so thanks for that and the nice comments!
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Onew is hot with whoever he's with so long as the writer is good. And Onkey I have soft places for. So yeah. This is good!
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I was biting my hand in public. EVERYONE MUST THINK I'M A MANIAC. THIS STORY. FSDJF
Starving for contact, Jinki crawled up Kibum’s glistening body and brought their lips together, hungrily kissing Kibum’s greedy mouth. They found themselves frotting again while Jinki grabbed and squeezed all the fleshy places on Kibum’s body.
This is so sensual. I LOVE bossy demanding Key and equally eagar and demanding and sensual Onew. The dynamics are so beautifully sexy yet wonderfully sweet. sdfjsd I'M GOING TO GIVE UP TYPING A INTELLIGENT COHERENT COMMENT BC THESE TWO LITTLE LOVE BUNNIES SFJDLFK
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Thanks for the lovely comment!
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