Drabble: Waiting and Dating

[joshdonnalyman]

Just a little drabble for the avoidmynose Rachel/Lea Comment Ficacthon. The prompt was Will/Rachel, he doesn't understand how he can be jealous of a teenage boy. This was written quickly but I would love to know what you think!

Comments

[jaymcb]

sweet

[joshdonnalyman]

Thanks for the review. I'm glad you liked it.

[paynesgrey]

Lovely job!

[joshdonnalyman]

Thank you so much!

[wistfulwatcher]

This is fantastic. I absolutely love the style of this fic, the clipped sentences that really advance the story and yet hold a lot of emotion, like this paragraph: She mentions it first. She asks him one day, when they are at his apartment, what's happening between them. She notices it too. He eventually tells her how he feels but is adamant about nothing happening until she graduates and turns 18. Rachel says she will wait.

This is my other favorite line: So, he watches them. Watches them sing together. Watches them dance. Watches the boy kiss her when she does something particularly adorable. I absolutely love the tiniest bit of creeper in that sentence, that is so completely in character.

This was such a great piece, and so sweet. Thank you!

[joshdonnalyman]

Thank you so much for this review! I'm glad you liked the style. It was also the first time I've written in present tense, so I was a little nervous about it. I'm happy to know it sounded okay and that you liked it. :)

[okvegascowgirl]

really, really lovely!

[joshdonnalyman]

Thank you!