Title: A Darker Shade of Twilight Pairing: Sirius/Remus Rating: R-ish Category: Angst (As Usual) Warnings: Slash Summary: Snapshots of a relationship over the years
This is so beautifully written and so bittersweet; I especially love the way they don't know how to express the feelings they have about being reunited.
There are all these little details that just work; one that comes to mind is Remus having books in the bedcovers. That's happened to me and to so many other bookwormy people I've known, and it just makes the characters so real.
Oh God. Here via underlucius's recc, and I'm all snuffly now. It's the resignation in the final paragraph, that they're there again, and they've lost so much, and the struggle they had to be in love against a war. And yes it's beautiful, little things like the 'stone-sea' and the 'pale-moths'.
I like your poetic way of portraying so marvellously how it went in your eyes, and I like your phrases (Lord and Master of All That is Obscene I appreciate, because not many would dare to do or say this) that make a whole of this.
A few nitpicks, though (nothing too drastic, just typos):
and Sirius buries his face in the back of Remus' neck. smelling soap and paper and the faintest musk of fur. -- I assume that you meant to put a comma after Remus' neck.
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If they were wiser, the would know to think of themselves as lost -- they would know, not the.
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There are all these little details that just work; one that comes to mind is Remus having books in the bedcovers. That's happened to me and to so many other bookwormy people I've known, and it just makes the characters so real.
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I love your writing.
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This is so beautiful. You really have a wonderful writing style. So unique, richly descriptive, and great flow to the story.
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A few nitpicks, though (nothing too drastic, just typos):
and Sirius buries his face in the back of Remus' neck. smelling soap and paper and the faintest musk of fur. -- I assume that you meant to put a comma after Remus' neck.
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If they were wiser, the would know to think of themselves as lost -- they would know, not the.
I enjoyed this: thank you.
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