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lanbeo June 18 2013, 10:19:30 UTC
Ok, so Brian joins Justin in his journey, hmm, I don't think I love the ideal, I think it's OOC for Brian to do so, 'cause yeah, he likes adventure, he doesn't mind take a risk, but he's also a control freak, and a life like this, I don't think it's suit Brian. (Consider this is an AU fic about Justin's character, I think it's safe to do whatever with him, but still, Brian is pretty much canon, so his change of life really bug me)

And also, Bryson Kennedy is pretty lame fake name, don't you think?

I'm sorry my comment is like this, it's because I love your writing so much, and have higher hope from your works. This fic started out great, and the twist made it better. But I don't think I like the endding. Aww....

'Till next time then.

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kachelofen June 18 2013, 10:57:42 UTC
No need to apologise. I do want to know what you think rather than giving a bland response. So thank you for being honest. In my defense I have to point to the 'hokum' warning I gave in the beginning though.

Thank you also for being so complimentary about my writing in general and for commenting throughout. :-)

ETA: I just wanted to mention that I do actually agree with you on most points. Both are OOC to some extent, no argument there. Take care.

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blue_eyedstar June 18 2013, 11:35:43 UTC
*applauds*

Perfect ending! ❤❤❤

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kachelofen June 18 2013, 17:50:14 UTC
Thank you. And thank you for all your lovely comments. ♥

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bksbracelet June 18 2013, 12:08:48 UTC
Lovely story a completely different arc which is refreshing thank you so much hugs Chris

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kachelofen June 18 2013, 17:51:18 UTC
Thank you, Chris. I was trying to do something different and I'm glad you enjoyed it. :-)

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koalared June 18 2013, 12:56:40 UTC
Loved it!
I've always loved a good con. I think Justin and Brian both would have made good con men. Super intelligent with enough flair and charm that people wold believe them.
Enjoyed the journey immensely Thank you.

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kachelofen June 18 2013, 17:54:09 UTC
I agree. The charm and the looks alone would let anybody forget everything else straight away. Lol.

Thank you so much for your comments. :-)

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poiuhbvs34567 June 18 2013, 14:24:31 UTC
I saw your update at work and could not wait to come back home to read it.
The OOC in your story does not bother me because it is coherent with the plot. And to be honest, I would have been upset if he did not choose to leave with Justin.
About my lil theory, I was wrong and right. Your title and the way you wrote the story reminded me of the french song "bonnie and clyde", in every strophe they tell us their story using "you" and "we". But I thought that Brian was writing their story in a diary after Justin's death to deal with what happened.(that is the reason I ignored Justin's POV)
Anyway, it is always a pleasure to read you because you are very talented. Thank you.

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kachelofen June 18 2013, 18:13:48 UTC
Interesting idea, but even I wouldn't be bold enough to post a story with a major character death without a big warning at the beginning. Lol. It is a bit of a Bonnie and Clyde story, at least it could be considered the beginning of it. Hopefully Brian and Justin won't end the same way. :-)

Thank you for your warm praise. It was lovely talking to you. :-)

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