[fic] cruel intentions - revelation chapter 13

[kajornwan]

Six months without an update.. I should be slaughtered. But I'm back, and I hope to be able to update faster now that muse is back otherwise it'll take a decade to finish this fic ^^!. To make up for it, here's the longest chapter I've ever written. ^_

Comments

[c11]

why the tomatoes? you respected the line of the manga and of CI very well and I like the angst in the chapter: you couldn't made it without a confrontation between the two. That is cruel but the fact that nothing was left unsaid is good. I am not that fond of violence but they are not banker, are they? (no offense: I like to read Silke-chan story as well) What would be surprising is that they just talk like good boys.
thanks for sharing the chapter.

[kajornwan]

*hugs* Thank you for understanding me. I thought and thought and thought about this and while I didn't really want to do this to Fei, I, too felt it was necessary to show Mikhail's pain. And the point was simply to illustrate that whatever Fei feels, Mikhail feels it twice as much. Fei needs to know he has something at stake for his actions and it doesn't just damage A x A, it damages those around him as well, especially Mikhail. I'm glad you think the conversation was appropriate. This is the reason why I choose to call this sequel 'Revelation'. Nothing will be left unsaid in this sequel, that goes for all characters in the manga. Thank you for your kind comment *hugs*

[angel0399]

Even as I re-read this, I can clearly picture the turmoil that Mikhail was feeling. I know that these kinds of chapters aren't easy to write, or read, but I feel that this was very necessary in order for the characters to move forward.

His love for Fei was killing him. And that admission on camera drove in the final nail. I hope that after the events on the ship, our lovers can find some peace with each other.

[kajornwan]

Well, it certainly isn't easy to write, because a part of me kept saying, "don't you dare write this down!!" LOL But I too think it was necessary, as you put it, to move the characters forward. I think for all of them to get out of this mess, the ugly truth has to be thrown in their faces, and that goes for Mik, Fei, Asami, and Aki and even Yoh. And I could have written another NT with the chit-chat, but that would resolve nothing, just like NT resolved nothing. I'm glad that you understand my POV and support me on this when I'm not even sure I fully support myself LOL (I rewrote this about 5 times!) *hugs* But thank you so much for the hard work. I hope to be able to give Fei some peace too (not sure if I can give Mikhail that though...)

[angel0399]

Very cool that you decided to post it all in 1 chapter. When I looked at it, =_= I was like "17 pages though?!" Lol!!

And then I read it, and I couldn't put it down. I had to stay up and read all of it, and I almost cried, at like 3 am, lol!

We all love Fei, we don't want to see him tortured. And yet, he didn't understand the severity of his actions. He didn't fully grasp his importance to Mikhail.

NT...yea. Now, I was a newbie to the series, so I just read all of this like last year, and at the end, I was happy for Asami and Aki as they were the main pair in the story.

But it did break my heart to see Fei left behind, with Yoh asking him to end it. And that was it. I remember asking myself "That's it?" b/c at the time, I didn't know that Sensei was going to continue VF.

[kajornwan]

Actually I nearly split it into two chapters, but I have a thing with the number 13 (I don't know why, but my life in general circles around this number XD) and I thought, well, if I'm going to commit a suicide over a fic, I might as well do it in #13 XD

And yet, he didn't understand the severity of his actions. He didn't fully grasp his importance to Mikhail.You are so right. Fei grasped nothing but his own pain. An insecure person is selfish in a way and this is Fei's major flaw and the problem that will forever keep him from being happy unless someone slaps him to his senses. But dont' get me wrong, I love Fei because of his flaws or else I'd be Aki's fan, so by that statement I'm not condemning him or anything. But I do see this as a real problem that has to be fixed and Fei does need some fixing before he would allow himself to be happy. And being as strong and stubborn as he is, I believe it takes one hell of a punch, if not several, to get him to see it, rather than a sweet puppy talk. The Fei I love is very strong with one

[radcat38]

Wow...what a chapter. Loved this retelling of VF. You captured and made me feel the pain of Mik and Fei. My heart clenched and became full of angst and pain and tears came to my eyes. You did a magnificant job of capturing these two men in pain and in the destruction of their relationship. Definitely not throwing tomatoes but flowers (or bishies). Good job. Excellant writing. Cannot wait for more. Poor Aki in this but liked how you had more interactions within his time with the Russians. Aki may be down but he still has his strengths, pride, and fire. And he is usually honest and caring towards others even when kidnapped (again) and held by Mik's group. He tried to make things right between Fei and Mik even though both men have kidnapped him and mistreated him Aki still has his beautiful soul and still cares for others. Testament to how special Aki is and what Asami sees in him.
We will wait for you and will look forward to what you have instore for us...what a ride!

[kajornwan]

Wow what a great comment. *_* Thank you so much for letting me know that you like it and that I was able to illustrate their pain the way I wanted to. It was a very difficult chapter to write and I rewrote it many times. ^^! Poor Aki indeed. And while I'm not a fan of Aki in general, lately I do think his extraordinary spirit suits Asami well and it's important to show this contrast between Fei and Aki and why Asami picked Aki as well as why Mikhail picked Fei. Aki will play quite a role in being the cupid, I think (and Mikhail will do that for A x A too) XD Thank you so much for stopping by *_*

[kajornwan]

OMG you make me feel really bad for not being able to reply in Italian!! XD I shall treasure my first Italian comment!

But thank you and I'm glad you didn't think it was lame. It was really painful actually to have to follow the manga and I'm suffocating doing it because I have very little room to move. But luckily sensei left a lot unsaid and I intend to reveal all with this fic. Thanks for stopping by, sweetie.

P.S. Of course, I'll write Yoh. I can't help but write Yoh, he just has so much to write about. While I'm not a fan of Yoh x Fei, but Yoh himself is one hell of an angsty character to explore and I've always had fun writing him even in CI. And this might surprise you, Yoh will have a very crucial role afterwards *winks*

[nekomurasaki]

Awesome chapter! Yes, lots of angst and I do feel for Mikhail... he has been through so much. This is worth the 6 month wait >_< Glad your muse is back!!!

[kajornwan]

Oh good *phew* I just wish I can deliver something good after 6 months. I should be able to write faster now that muse is back (even though I have just 10 mins a day to write LOL but without my dear muse, I'm afraid I'm useless) Thanks you for stopping by and let me know your thoughts. *hugs*