amazing mary!!!! love her!! protective boys towards mary are too sweet for words. finally dean is trusting someone but then the angst and the cliffhanger!! you evil writer xD a very good christmaa present!
Like this. Very interesting take. I like how you accounted for all the players, which I think makes AUs much better. Loved John's perspective on the boys. I was looking forward to watching him unload on Tom and Mick, but Mary was fantastic. I like how you brought in elements of Max Miller's story, and kept Mary's connection with hunting. And the way you handled the salt was brilliant, because we mostly got John's thoughts on the subject, so the revelation about Mary was both unexpected but fitting. I really liked the scene with Dean and John comparing scars. It was so authentic and heartbreaking. Can't wait to read the rest.
Thank you so much for your lovely feedback. I’m pleased that you’re liking things so far and I’m hoping that I’ll be able add the next chapter by the start of the New Year. :) I was surprised myself that the story is told more from John’s POV and thoughts as when I first started writing this, I originally intended it to be more from Mary’s but my mind kept writing John instead. I actually found the parts with Mary a lot more difficult to write. I don’t know why but I seem to find Mary’s character really hard to get right and I’m still not completely happy with how I make her come across in certain parts of this.
I do try to keep things as American as possible when writing for SPN but I guess my British just can’t help slipping through sometimes. :)
You mean your AWESOME can't help slipping through! :P
Yeah, I think John was perfect for the perspective because of his hesitancy with the kids. Seeing them through his eyes just...I dunno. It really drives it home. And Mary's role in the plot means that keeping her a bit mysterious enhances the suspense. And the reader kinda feels as betrayed as John did that she was keeping secrets.
Oh, one thing I forgot to mention:
That was when they decided that they wouldn't be fostering anymore babies. It was just too hard when you had to say goodbye.
I thought this is was just...guh. My mom started doing foster care after she lost a baby when I was a kid, and she only took newborns. No matter how many times you do it, it is heartshattering. This was a really nice touch to the story.
It's good to know that you think Mary's character seems to be coming across well as it is something I worry about when writing for her. :) I've always been a big fan of fics from Johns POV so I guess I shouldn't be surprised that I ended up writing a lot of this from John's perspective. :)
I once looked after my baby godson 24/7 for over six months when his mom was having hard time, and when the time came to hand him back it nearly killed me. I never imagined it being that hard. It was like someone had taken a sledge hammer to my heart! It hurt just to breathe. I'm kinda ashamed to admit that for a brief moment when I first found out I had to give him back I considered just taking him and running. I never would have gone through with it but it just hurt so much to know I had to let him go.
Okay so I just finished reading the 15 chapters and I am so hooked!!!!! So Hooked, love the story you have going here and the way you are weaving it is wonderful. I'm am so looking forward to reading more of your story.
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Love protective!Dean and scared!Sam.
Can't wait for the rest.
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protective boys towards mary are too sweet for words.
finally dean is trusting someone but then the angst and the cliffhanger!! you evil writer xD
a very good christmaa present!
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Merry Christmas x
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Dialogue's a little British. ;)
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I do try to keep things as American as possible when writing for SPN but I guess my British just can’t help slipping through sometimes. :)
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Yeah, I think John was perfect for the perspective because of his hesitancy with the kids. Seeing them through his eyes just...I dunno. It really drives it home. And Mary's role in the plot means that keeping her a bit mysterious enhances the suspense. And the reader kinda feels as betrayed as John did that she was keeping secrets.
Oh, one thing I forgot to mention:
That was when they decided that they wouldn't be fostering anymore babies. It was just too hard when you had to say goodbye.
I thought this is was just...guh. My mom started doing foster care after she lost a baby when I was a kid, and she only took newborns. No matter how many times you do it, it is heartshattering. This was a really nice touch to the story.
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It's good to know that you think Mary's character seems to be coming across well as it is something I worry about when writing for her. :) I've always been a big fan of fics from Johns POV so I guess I shouldn't be surprised that I ended up writing a lot of this from John's perspective. :)
I once looked after my baby godson 24/7 for over six months when his mom was having hard time, and when the time came to hand him back it nearly killed me. I never imagined it being that hard. It was like someone had taken a sledge hammer to my heart! It hurt just to breathe. I'm kinda ashamed to admit that for a brief moment when I first found out I had to give him back I considered just taking him and running. I never would have gone through with it but it just hurt so much to know I had to let him go.
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Thank you for sharing!!!
Looking for the next installment!!!!
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Thank you!!! Glad you're lliking the story and I'll try my best not to keep you waiting too long for the next installment. :)
Thanks again for taking the time to read and comment. :)
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