Comments | kc_evans: What I like to pretend is a fic

kc_evans

What I like to pretend is a fic

Mar 29, 2007 00:08

Untitled
Words: 4,511
Rating: PG
Warnings: Slightly crack-ish cause it'll never happen in canon (and probably for good reason); unbeta-ed; fluffy

Disclaimer: I don't own Prince of Tennis or the characters mentioned within ( Read more... )

tezu/ryo

Comments 20

litchick87 March 29 2007, 06:47:16 UTC

this was really cute! i knew tezuka would jump to conclusions, but it is somehow a very him thing to do, especially where ryoma's concerned. great job!

kc_evans March 31 2007, 02:53:10 UTC

I guess Tezuka was too predictable here, wasn't he? Though, yes, I agree with Ryoma thrown into the equation anything can happen. :P

Thank you for the lovely comment! Hope you enjoyed it. :)

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kc_evans March 31 2007, 02:53:48 UTC

I think you said it all: poor Tezuka. Or at least poor Tezuka for being tortured by me. And yes, in the end he still has Ryoma so he doesn't have too much to complain, right? :D

rasengan_gurl02 March 29 2007, 13:22:41 UTC

Ryoma Loves Tezuka even with the glasses or the contact lenses ^____^

Love this! :D

kc_evans March 31 2007, 02:54:49 UTC

Yes, he does! That's what so great about Ryoma in this case: he'll take Tezuka with four eyes or with two. :P

I appreciate you letting me know your thoughts on this!

Re: What I like to pretend is a fic pir_anha March 29 2007, 13:58:40 UTC

Tezuka hmmed vaguely, staring off into space thoughtfully. It seemed as though Echizen did indeed prefer glasses over contacts.

shouldn't that be the other way around, tezuka suspecting that echizen prefers contacts over glasses?

it's a cute story! i feel that towards the end tezuka and ryoma are getting OOC a bit; i don't perceive them as ever being so outspoken. but that's just my view of the characters, and the story is still cute and well-written overall.

Re: What I like to pretend is a fic kc_evans March 31 2007, 03:01:18 UTC

Oooh, you are absolutely right .. thank you for being sharp enough to catch that. So much for days of editing when there's such a big blunder in there!

I also appreciate you letting me know what you thought didn't work in this story. Perhaps I have made them a little too OOC but I assure you I didn't notice it while I was writing (or editing it) this. I also forgot to put a fluff warning on this, which I figure gives me a little leeway since - you're right - these two are not exactly the gushy, emotional type. But your comments were greatly appreciated and I will keep them in mind for (gasp! hide!) future fics. Thank you for letting me know your thoughts! :)

Loves you ! mimineko_chan March 30 2007, 04:01:31 UTC

Oh my god, that was sooooo cute ! Tezuka would do anything for Ryoma and Ryoma being the brat he is, will surely, in the future, do something that will make him run 100 laps ! LOL !
Just a small mistake : "It seemed as though Echizen did indeed prefer glasses over contacts." Shouldn't be "It seemed as through Echizen did indeed prefer contacts over glasses."
Doesn't really matter, your fic is still very good. Squeal in delight ! I hope that you will write more TezuRyo fic in the near future (hopefully, very near future). LOL !
Hugs you tightly, mimikitty

Re: Loves you ! kc_evans March 31 2007, 03:04:12 UTC

Thank you for pointing out that mistake! I'm really embarrassed it's there and I'm equally glad people like you are around to catch them.

And thank you for such lovely comments and your enthusiasm. I do hope to continue writing more as well since I need the practice! :D

mimineko_chan March 31 2007, 18:53:38 UTC

Don't be embarrased ! Everyone makes mistakes ! Beside, who care about these small little details. Your story rocks ! You don't need practive at all ! Just keep writing what comes to mind and I'm sure it'll be fantastic !