A tanka in response - a Poetry Friday post

[kellyrfineman]

Last month, we all wrote sonnets. Well, everyone in the poetry sisters except me wrote curtal sonnets, a form invented (or at least made popular) by Gerard Manley Hopkins. This month, we are each writing a tanka in response to somebody else's sonnet. I have been known to refer to a tanka as "a haiku pulling a trailer", but I've also discussed it

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response

[ext_1565055]

I love those 'tasty morsels for the tongue'. Both sing praises for Hopkin's 'cauliflower' words, this time your words.

[lpsalas]

There is something to savour on every single line here, Kelly. The feral bird-song clocks are my favorite this morning! Tomorrow, who knows? Thanks for all the resources too.

[ext_703532]

Your cauliflower imagery is much gentler than mine. One poet sees an ear swollen from repeated hits, the other, delicate flower clusters. Poetry delivers it all, yes? Thanks for reading and responding to my rather brutal poem so kindly. I love how you just went with your feelings.

[ext_3476210]

I love the "cauliflower words" and "tasty morsels for the tongue."

Feral cuckoos

[ext_709338]

I cracked up at the very first line. FERAL BIRDSONG CLOCKS!!!! That's the most perfect description of maddened cuckoo-ing, ever, and speaks nicely to both Hopkins and Sara's take on him. Well done! And then a savory finish with cauliflorets - wow.

You're a wordsmith indeed.