LJ Idol Week 2 - Fold

[kianna_leigh]

“This house has a unique history. Not because of the people who lived in it, but because of the people who disappeared in it. Completed in 1901 in Berwick Maine and originally named Caufield Manor the house was built by Henry Caufield, a wealthy English gentleman who came to New England to expand his business. He moved his family into the house in

Comments

[kecharasmoon]

I hope you continue this! Though you've got some tense issues and typos as well, just fyi. Always time before the poll to fix it!

[kianna_leigh]

Thanks for the heads up about the errors. I posted it with minimal looking over to get it out of the way. I was going to go back later and edit. Laziness. LOL

[kandigurl]

I really enjoyed this story! I second kecharasmoon, there are several typos that briefly pull you out of the story, but it's overall very compelling and enjoyable! Let me know if you'd like some help catching any mistakes. :)

[kianna_leigh]

I'm glad you liked it. And yea, this story is typo city. Laziness. I'll get a beta, I swear!

[shay_writes]

I enjoyed this and I want to know what happens next.

[jexia]

This ^

[kianna_leigh]

Glad you liked it.

[kianna_leigh]

I'm glad you enjoyed it. If I get a chance I might continue this verse for a little while longer.

[uncawes]

This is a really cool story. I believe one of the other comments suggested fixing some typos (it's site, not sight and make all the Faux names match were the two that stood out the most).
Please do that and make a cool story into a great one.

[kianna_leigh]

Thanks for the pointers. Editing really played second fiddle to just getting it down on paper so there are weird and stupid mistakes like that.

[kagomeshuko]

Wow. This went in a different direction than I had expected! I hope you like my entry!

[kianna_leigh]

I'm glad you though it was different. That's what I was going for. And I'm sure I'll like your entry. I'll go read it now.