3b -- Definitely the first! Then the others would go to the wardrobe the same way they would normally -- perhaps all by looking for a place to hide, or Lucy, or perhaps running from the Macready.
Hi! I shall try not to disappear completely in future. :)
I really, really like the first... But I kinda want to have Edmund stumble in alone before all three go through? Or, I mean, I suppose Lucy could return... maybe after Edmund goes through... I... why am I thinking about this? I am Not Writing It.
I would very much like to see more of Lies. The structure - I liked it! It certainly wasn't spoonfeeding; it called for thought and engagement, and maybe some subtleties passed me by, but I don't see that as a problem. (I ENJOY it when I reread stories, and find things I hadn't seen first time through!).
And re: Lucy and Edmund -- hmmm... could the older three miss her, and knowing of her well-established liking for stroking and nestling up with fur, suspect she's in a back corner of the wardrobe, and step in to feel about for her? Though for them to miss her, even briefly, she'd presumably have to have been kidnapped and imprisoned for an appreciable length of time. (We can debate whether they really did "do exactly the same thing" elsewhere!)
I like stuff you have to reread too! But I get the sense -- I mean, the feedback's limited, but what I do have -- I get the sense no one's even come close to picking up on this particular thing, and I can see why. I don't want to drop a neon sign on it, though; if I can't get it to shine organically I need to drop it.
We can debate whether they really did "do exactly the same thing" elsewhere!
Bring it, 'cuz this is one of my fandom rage points. :)
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(Hi, also! It's good to hear from you.)
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I really, really like the first... But I kinda want to have Edmund stumble in alone before all three go through? Or, I mean, I suppose Lucy could return... maybe after Edmund goes through... I... why am I thinking about this? I am Not Writing It.
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I would very much like to see more of Lies. The structure - I liked it! It certainly wasn't spoonfeeding; it called for thought and engagement, and maybe some subtleties passed me by, but I don't see that as a problem. (I ENJOY it when I reread stories, and find things I hadn't seen first time through!).
And re: Lucy and Edmund -- hmmm... could the older three miss her, and knowing of her well-established liking for stroking and nestling up with fur, suspect she's in a back corner of the wardrobe, and step in to feel about for her? Though for them to miss her, even briefly, she'd presumably have to have been kidnapped and imprisoned for an appreciable length of time.
(We can debate whether they really did "do exactly the same thing" elsewhere!)
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We can debate whether they really did "do exactly the same thing" elsewhere!
Bring it, 'cuz this is one of my fandom rage points. :)
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