Mini-Challenge: Speaking

Jan 27, 2008 21:46

Not the thing I started writing mid-essay the other day, but it bit me just as I polished off my references and screamed "I WIN ESSAY!" in primaeval triumph to the sky ( Read more... )

queen, challenge, winterknights

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annarti January 27 2008, 12:51:25 UTC
Tintauri gets creepier, more insane and more fantastic every time you write him XD The man gives me GOOSEBUMPS and I love it XD

The story itself is quite chilling, too. Even though it has all the hallmarks of a classic brave king and beautiful queen story, there's just that little bit extra that makes it creeeeepy X)

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ladylight January 27 2008, 16:04:58 UTC
Yaaay, goosebumps is what I was hoping for :D Thankyous, hon!

Heh heh, that's an interesting thought ... I wonder if someone who didn't know the King/Queen would think the story was creepy? It's a bit of a plotline non-event, but maybe I should put it on Elfy to find out (it's not like I haven't got 50+ spaces anyway ;P)

You are so much love for reading all these <3 <3 but you should be getting back to your kickayss!May story, which I have already decided you are writing. O;D

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shanra January 27 2008, 14:17:43 UTC
his boots speaking loud and soft

Very pretty, very chilling phrasing, me dear.

the titan-toothed mountains

Apart from having visions of Tintauri totally pwning GW titans, that was a terrific image. Very, very befitting. Very beautifully done. ^-^ *hearts Tintauri rather a lot more than she probably should*

Very chilling story. *hearts Tintauri all the same* (Question, how does he feel about attracting so many fans? ^-~) I loved the little touches of where you strewn the story framing this. I loved the mystery of that story contrasted with the clarity of the tale Tintauri is telling. So very, very pretty a wrought tale. Also scary to see/hear that he's actually talking to a corpse.

*glomps Tintauri just because she can, has very little sense of self-preservation*

Very beautiful, me dear!

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ladylight January 27 2008, 16:15:17 UTC
I can't look at the word 'titan' and think Prometheus any more. T_T

I do get the feeling he talks to dead people quite a lot. They probably make more sense to him than the breathing ones. And don't get all fretty and emotional ...

Thankees so muchly for reading, me precious, you're always so quick with your comments and it makes me most happy to read them ^_^ *glomp*

(*cough* I have no idea what he'd think about approbation of any sort - I can't imagine him encountering it much in that world O_o)

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shanra January 27 2008, 16:18:49 UTC
Awwwww. At least you get to think of Greek mythology as opposed to Guild Wars?

They probably do, yes. That would be very easy to see. They'd agree with you no matter what you say too. I love how you've only implied that she's dead too.

*hugs back* Thank you for making me go on a mini-reading spree. *needs to get back into the swing of reading/writing things*

(I think I'd be very worried if he did encounter it often.)

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ladylight January 27 2008, 16:52:42 UTC
Hahaha, no, I meant that the Guild Wars reference has replaced my natural Greek mythology association XD;;

They'd agree with you no matter what you say too.
*cackles* Well, yes ... they wouldn't disagree, anyway ...

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saltnester January 27 2008, 15:33:52 UTC
Does he usually use 'sweetheart'? Just strikes a little odd there...that was one highly, highly creepy story. Especially the living ever after. [nods]

I did start wondering why the child wasn't moving early in the story, but I didn't recognise Tints as narrator ...maybe a faint hint on build or how wan light through the panes makes the strands of his rather messy hair transluscent earlier? - always, always a shock to find that fellow's blood is warm, he is truly made of awesome. And, unfortunately for him, probably the safest of the winterknights to glomp.

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ladylight January 27 2008, 16:46:30 UTC
Heh, didn't notice that at all! It just came out automatically when I typed ... *ponders a bit* I think he says 'sweetheart' for the same reason he calls Tal 'my dear', or feels likely to call a soldier of equal or lesser rank 'my lad'/'old boy' ... it's a habit he's picked up from listening to people, but to him they're almost titles of their own - just ones that people seem to find softer than the norm. I'd think he understands affection but doesn't apply it that way - just tries preemptively to defuse a bit of the 'argh' people feel about him so he can have sensible conversations. All little girls are 'sweetheart', all women are 'my dear', etc ( ... )

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saltnester January 27 2008, 18:00:01 UTC
Ah well, if that's how you heard it, it's unfair to correct him...it's just that Tints is such a strong, snowy character and the odd room-temperature annonymity jars a little. Just that little extra bit of Tintaurishness (Tintaresqueness?) to get the reader wondering 'is that...? what the...?' would make it all hold/flow together a little better, I think. The story remains the story, quite neutral.

O_o you speak like I could help it. It is 'Lyssa-writing, then with pale things and snow in, you'd need more than a legion of undead and a dead-damned demi-deity to keep me away.

[snerk] I have such an urge to 'toon the lot of their reaction to the concept of fangirls now...

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ladylight January 28 2008, 10:59:56 UTC
Mmm, I do see your point. Perhaps 'sweetheart' is a bit TOO warm. I tried 'little one' and didn't feel like that was quite right either, but 'my dear' seems to set up a certain distance which I like more when I look at it now ... references have been somewhat thinned out as well (not here, Elsewheredraft) ...

I've also added a few more Tintauri-like descriptors here and there and changed a quote or two, though I haven't gone so far as to say knight or winterknight and I'm now wondering if I should have ... I always wonder these things AFTER they've been submitted to Elfwood, of course ...

*cackles and watches Scadamain trying to muster a tactical response from the hill* XD

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ladylight January 28 2008, 11:17:36 UTC
*is extremely happy that someone wonders why he told the story* :D

Thank you so much for reading and commenting! I've been out of the swing of things for well over half a year and it's unspeakably lovely to be reading people's comments again.

I'm woeful at keeping up descriptions of where people are, so I had to consciously try to put more in through the story ... not that it wasn't cheating for such a short story anyway ;D *crosses fingers behind back*

Thanks for making an already great exam-finishing day even better :)

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ladylight February 13 2008, 16:09:29 UTC
(Lissy's Comet makes its biannual comment orbit *coughcough* ...) ;P ( ... )

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