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[ladyofmasbolle]

Some of a Very short, very basic poem that i began..

Bittersweet Nostalgia

Bittersweet nostalgia takes me hostage

Comments

[saturnial]

its.. I dunno.
Sad, sharp - not a wishy washy overly dramatic group of words, its cutting. You can't ignore it. its amazing. Congratulations

[ladyofmasbolle]

::huggles::

You are such a good critic. Thank you! Now, if you were only online more often:P ::pokes tongue out::

[starburst1237]

Beautiful. It was simple in such a complex way. Sounded like a lyrics to a song. *appluads*

[ladyofmasbolle]

::grins:: I feeeel proud:) Actually, my poems never seem like poems. So, i suppose they are songs. ^^

Hmm.. But then, aren't songs just part of poetry?

Lol, never mind. My brain feels like someone tried to mush it up with an electric mixer on high...

[saturnial]

Can I make a song out of this?

[ladyofmasbolle]

Yep:) I'll just copyright it as a poem and I'm leasing the copyright to you so you can make a song out of it. xD

Lol, I can't wait:)

[red_tulip171]

I like it and I dont. It evokes emotions yet there is something missing somethings not right.Like you described a feeling and yet it somehow slipped through your fingers like you somehow havnt quite caught it.

[ladyofmasbolle]

I LOVE YOU STEF!
Some of a Very short, very basic poem that i began..

I haven't finished it yet. ::grins::

Please, Please, Please tell me how I can improve!

[anokam]

Currently feeling very jealous. Evil Arch and her amazing writing.

For real, though, that was bloody fantastic. I have to read your fics sometime soon.

Love you,

Savi

[ladyofmasbolle]

Lol--> At least you have a love life - The only thing I occasionally get is emails from this guy's friend telling me he likes me (He's so.. blah.. I like personalities.)

It wasn't that good--> Like Stef (redtulip-insert numbers here-) said - It's missing something.

I love your work. I'm no poet, believe me; just an angst writer. ^^

Love you!

-Arch-

[epices]

Actually I really like it for the kind of just-brushing-across-your --fingertips emotion. Its so stark and confused. I think being too obvious would lose that somewhat.

*koff koff* just a random passerby...passing by. x)

[ladyofmasbolle]

::Grins::

Thank you for "reviewing."

Pray tell, how did you find my "humble abode?"