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Debriefing part 2

Dec 02, 2008 10:54

Title: Debriefing
Rating: T (for now)
Pairing: Laura/Bill
Summary: It's the middle of the night, and Laura is at the end of her rope. She finds Bill asleep on the couch. Takes place between 4x08 and 4x09 (so spoilers up to this point)
Words: 2322 in part 2.

Huge thanks to tjonsey and innealta for encouragement and amazing beta work. Love you guys ( Read more... )

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Comments 36

flamingo55 December 3 2008, 03:38:34 UTC

Love. Love. Love. And I completely agree about The Hub. There is one, and only one, correct response when the love of your life says "I love you" and that is "I LOVE YOU TOO." I thought all men knew that out of self-preservation, if nothing else. *slaps Bill*.

I love the way you had him blurt out his admission, and that she finally called him on the way he's jerked her around, emotionally.

I'm trying to think of a holiday that I can celebrate tomorrow. I think I'll designate it prOn day. :)

larsfarm77 December 3 2008, 15:59:28 UTC

I'm so happy you enjoyed -- thank you so much for your notes along the way. They were very helpful! I know I'm as much a Bill fangirl as a Laura one, but I really do think that the writers did him a disservice. *They* wanted that little hommage to SW (and Han Solo), even though it doesn't work for Bill or the situation.

I was trying to figure out a believable way to have him tell her, when I thought -- what if he just did it without thinking? I'm so happy it worked for you too. And that convo about his jerking her around -- LONG overdue on the show.

Bwahahhahaha! Yeah, pron today :D

bluelike December 3 2008, 15:01:01 UTC

beautiful, beautiful writing!
great first chapter and very enjoyable second
their interactions is marvelously written!
thanks for sharing!

larsfarm77 December 3 2008, 16:01:17 UTC

Thank you so much -- I had a lot of fun writing the awkwardness and excitement of their living together (especially without having been intimate), and later finally getting all those issues between them out on the table. Thanks for sticking with this and I hope you enjoy part 3 today :)

just_smth December 3 2008, 16:17:37 UTC

Loved it. :) And it just makes me wonder if Bill was half-naked because of the heat, or because he had hoped for something like that. Not that he is the evil mastermind, but still... :)
Oh, and I'd say they are creating the majority of the problems themselves. For example, why Laura didn't tell Bill she loved him back is beyond my understanding. (Rhetorical question. No need to answer :)).

larsfarm77 December 3 2008, 16:27:36 UTC

Hee, that Bill, he *is* sneaky, but I realy do think that he would keep the room too warm in deference to her (he doesn't want to give her any excuses to find other arrangements :D).

Im my mind, Laura should have told him as well, but I'm trying to make this fit with canon (as much as a pron fic can) and we know from the Hub that Laura hadn't really come to terms with her feelings before then. LOL, I guess I answered though I didn't need to -- I love discussing this stuff.

Thanks so much for commenting!

just_smth December 3 2008, 19:05:33 UTC

Just because I want to make myself clear - I never doubted Bill kept room warm enough for Laura. He is after all gentleman and very interested in Laura staying where she is :) I was just curious about how planned Bill's state of undress was. :)

I love discussing that stuff too. And I like to occasionally rant at how canon should have more A/R in it. Just me ;)