Fanfic: Dirty Hands

[larsfarm77]

Again, apologies flist.

The second of two fics written for LJ Secret Santa 2007.

Title: Dirty Hands
Author: larsfarm77
Rating: MA
Words: 4901
Warnings: Sex. Lots of it.

Huge thanks to ellisandra, tjonesy, innealta and dorque_wrench for ideas and beta help. You guys rock!

Comments

[somadanne]

Oooh, this was lusciously hot! I love how you wove the New Caprica stuff in.

I particularly liked this part:

His weight cradled between her legs, her hands free to roam the warm expanse of his chest, to explore the wet heat where their bodies joined. She would wake, soaked and alone, her hand buried between her legs, knowing that while she could find relief, the emptiness would remain.

The last sentence just really gave a picture of Laura, how alone she usually is, and how empty that must be.

[larsfarm77]

Thanks! I felt the story needed more than just an "after heavy lifting" frak, lol, and I love the idea that maybe things went farther on NC than we saw. Adama's speech in UB felt like it had a very personal side to it, so it was fun to play with that.

And, yeah, poor Laura. I was thinking even with Emily in the last ep -- she makes a bond with someone and they're gone. Some peeps have complained that Adama is just a nurse this season, but I think it just goes to show how important Laura is to him and the deepening of their relationship is long overdue. Those sexy, longing looks need to evolve into some actual contact ... and soon ;).

[missbevcrusher]

There are so many things about this fic that I loved. I don't know where to start.

First, Laura working on the Daru Mozu--loved how you wrote that.

Secondly, Mostly she tried to push memories of that ugly little mud ball as far from her mind as she could. If the good memories got buried as well, she accepted that. It was the price of moving on. But sometimes at night, when she was forced to relinquish self-control to sleep, her mind indulged in the feel of sand under bare skin. His weight cradled between her legs, her hands free to roam the warm expanse of his chest, to explore the wet heat where their bodies joined. She would wake, soaked and alone, her hand buried between her legs, knowing that while she could find relief, the emptiness would remain.

... this was really touching. It conveyed Laura's loneliness and longing perfectly.

And now this... He waited until she met his eyes. “I made a decision after New Caprica. I can’t live with it, Laura. Not having you doesn’t change how I feel.” The depth of emotion in his gaze

[larsfarm77]

I'm so glad you enjoyed! I'm very firmly in the camp that they were intimate on New Caprica, and I always thought that during that boxing speech, he was talking to her. This was the original fluff fic for LJ SS, but I didn't think it was fluffy enough (so I wrote the galley one). Thanks so much for taking the time to let me know what you liked -- I'm grinning.

[gentlehobbit]

And even Zarek smiled at the end. A nice touch.

I really liked that you showed Laura getting her hands dirty as was hinted at in the episode, and that she really got a taste of what others had had to deal with for so long. And then, of course, Bill comes in -- I loved the way he wanted to doctor all of Laura's hurts (real or otherwise...)

[larsfarm77]

Hee, I remember that my betas pushed for some kind of different ending to this fic. Zarek was a fun perspective to try.

I really felt that after the speech in UB, Bill owed Laura some honesty, but he's not the type of guy to get anywhere without a push ;) Glad you enjoyed the fic, and thank you for commenting!

[samcasey]

WTF I havent commented on this before????

Well this is the second time ive read it AND I LOVE IT!!!

I love the thoughts in italics and the desire passion and love of the whole thing <3 Your imagery is stunning, Laura sweaty and in jeans <3 I also love u bunches for making tom happy for them <3

[samcasey]

Oh and Bill kissing it better GUH <3

[larsfarm77]

Mmm .. yeah ... an idea that came from my friend ellisandra. Loved writing it.

Both your icons are amazing!!

[larsfarm77]

That's my fault, I think. I originally posted this under a cut in adama_roslin, and later added it to my journal (I was, and still am, somewhat LJ impaired).

Most of my story ideas start as images (and they never seem to be in order), and Laura sweay and in jeans was definitely a favourite ;).

I love Tom as an outside perspective on A/R, particularly because he was on NC. Thank you so much for commenting likely again; I'm so happy you continue to enjoy the fic :)

[bookblather]

Oh my God, I am in awe. I discovered this fic through bsg_remix and I have to say, it is really, utterly, absolutely fucking fabulous. Pun absolutely intended (because if you can't pun in fandom, where the hell can you pun?).

Favorite parts include Laura interacting with Quentin and the kid on the Daru Mozu, because I love minor characters ridiculously and they were... I hesitate to say cute but I'm not coming up with anything else; “You didn’t listen during the safety briefing, did you?”, because Bill is so cute when he's worrying; actually all of their interactions in this scene are really in character and sweet and angry at the same time and just great; the sex, because... I hope I don't have to explain that one :D; and Tom Zarak. Because I have a ridiculous, irrational love for the King of Slime, and I love seeing his POV in fics for any reason whatsover.

In short, wow, I am so impressed. This was a joy to read.

[larsfarm77]

K, I'm blushing over here. You can pun all you want, LOL.

I love details: minor characters, little references to past eps, a sight, smell or taste, an alternate POV, and I'm so happy that you picked up on them. And I'm in love with caretaker!Bill. He owed Laura some honesty and affection after that brutal speech in UB, and I knew I needed to push a bit to get him there.

I used to skip from POV to POV, but have found it much more challenging (and effective) to stick with one or two. As a result, I just couldn't fit Bill's POV into this, and I love that zaleti did!

Thanks so much for the amazing comments -- I'm so happy you liked!

[bookblather]

He owed Laura some honesty and affection after that brutal speech in UB, and I knew I needed to push a bit to get him there.

Oh my God, he totally did. You know, I think that's part of why I love Adama/Roslin so much. It's not all puppies and kittens and rainbows for them. They can be absolutely brutal to each other, and then they can be so tender and affectionate that it takes your breath away. And sometimes they're doing it at the same time; it is my firm belief that the fight in Six of One was born out of affection on both sides (Laura wanted him to stop drinking, Bill wanted her to stop dying) and turned into them trying to hurt each other, and I'm still not sure why.

And yes, the little details are always what makes or breaks a story. Like the dust poofing off her hair. I used to work in a stables and let me tell you, so been there. Not with a Bill, though. :D

You're welcome! Thanks for writing such an amazing story!