Seventh Turning Cont..

[lauriel01]

Continuation of part 1...


I was set down in front of one of the strangers that had been with my father.  He was tall, dressed all in black.  His hazel eyes had tights lines around them as he regarded me.  I’ve often wondered what he thought of me, a small boy covered in smoke-grime and dirt.  My clothes were singed, and my hair, no longer fair

Comments

[pfyre]

oh - that was well done - scary, intense, refreshing from the pov of a child - a lovely insight to the SGA-1 Team....

thank you for sharing!

[lauriel01]

Thank you pfyre. I'm glad you enjoyed it.

[kriadydragon]

Very excellent. Outsider POVs are always the best, and your character was well done.

[lauriel01]

Thank you! I'm just happy the pov worked, tbh.

[lauriel01]

YW Listy. Thanks for the lovely feedback.

[linzi5]

Oh that was just plain lovely! Well done. Very beautifully told through the eyes of a child. I really enjoyed this. Thanks for sharing! :)

[lauriel01]

Thanks Linzi. As I said in a response above, I'm glad the pov worked. It's one of those that could easily go horribly wrong. :D I'm glad you enjoyed it.

[wraithfodder]

Loved it!

[lauriel01]

Thanks. :D