english2

[lexa978]

well here is my attempt at english. whatever. Mr. Thomas is going to tear it apart, but whatever.

Swamped

by me

The rocks swamped with salty water glisten

In the summer sun--except where five dependable

Kids stand clutching one another. Arms intertwined,

Their joy boils in the heat. White-caps form as

Waves crash, greeting their bare feet.

They

Comments

[mellin]

i know we haven't talked in quite a while
but
i like that very much
very very much.

(hello, by the way!)

[lexa978]

hahahha thanks. and hi! how have you been??

[crazedhippo]

i like that a lot, but i think it's "choose" instead of "chose" in the first stanza - tenses.

[lexa978]

oo you are correct! thank you (both for liking it and for correcting my tenses) Mr thomas would have caught that and murdered me for it