Comments | lilac_one: all hell's cubically contained

lilac_one

all hell's cubically contained

Jan 31, 2005 20:53

With great thanks to the source of plot bunnies, herein my first writing attempt not for a challenge in over a year. It's Due South, F/K, around 2770 words, PG.

( No Regrets )

Comments 31

mergatrude February 1 2005, 23:19:24 UTC

Wonderful! The opening and closing paragraphs are just wonderful. And the case in the middle - excellent. Great to have Ray saving the day.

lilac_one February 2 2005, 19:48:32 UTC

Thank you so much. I love it when Ray saves the day, too. Motorcycle through a window, anyone? He so loves his Fraser, and I so love all the UST.

lynnmonster February 2 2005, 00:12:06 UTC

Gah! LJ ate my feedback.

Here's attempt #2:

I love the toothpick solution -- very Ray.

Ray would bet anyone would be affected by Fraser on his knees with a knife between his teeth.

Oh, hell, yes.

I love this:

Fraser looked away. "I imagine regret is a common feeling when one is facing death."

"I imagine it is," Ray said, just as quietly. "But that's not an answer, that's a deflection."

...not least for the way it shows Ray's interrogation instincts.

I love Fraser's un-acted-upon life-or-death situation resolutions.

And of course I love it when he finally acts on them. *g*

lilac_one February 2 2005, 19:49:28 UTC

Ray would bet anyone would be affected by Fraser on his knees with a knife between his teeth.

Oh, hell, yes.

Amen, sista!

I so glad you liked it!

lamardeuse February 2 2005, 02:38:34 UTC

I like this very, very much. That last line is lovely. :)

lilac_one February 2 2005, 19:49:43 UTC

Thank you so much.

brooklinegirl February 2 2005, 03:05:51 UTC

ooh. GREAT beginning lines! WOnderful! And I adore the plotty part (that's always what escapes me - writing realistic plotty bits!), with the bags and the toothpick and annoying, dumb bad guys, and smart Ray and Fraser. The banter as they're escaping is nicely done, too. Cool fic!

lilac_one February 2 2005, 19:55:19 UTC

Thank you so, so much. I think plot is often overrated, but I'm incompetent at writing PWP, so I'm kind of stuck with it. Which come to think of it, may be why I write so rarely. I'm really glad you enjoyed it.

threequarters February 2 2005, 14:58:06 UTC

Oh I love this! The beginning and ending tie together perfectly and Ray and Fraser are spot on. The plot was very believable and certainly "wildly bizarre". Very nice work.

lilac_one February 2 2005, 19:58:22 UTC

I'm so happy you liked this. I wrote the beginning and ending lines first, and then I had to come up with a plot that would make it work. I'm glad it all worked out.