Second Chance Idol Week 7: Can't Get There From Here

[lilycobalt]

On what might have been the twenty-fifth day of the journey through the ruined city, Red stumbled over a piece of rubble that came up to her knees and did not get up. Caterina and her traveling companions tried everything they could to make her rise again. Their sealed, silent mouths could not call the redhead's name, even if they knew it, but

Comments

[jem0000000]

I hope she makes it okay. :)

[lilycobalt]

I hope so, too. I didn't give her much of a chance, though :(

[porn_this_way]

Creepy! This world was really interesting, especially the soul transfer technology.

[lilycobalt]

Thanks! I suppose that at first they thought it was just something to experiment with, but when a big asteroid's about to hit the earth, better not take chances. I think soul transfer tech would be interesting to experiment with in other fictional contexts.

[heeroluva]

What a bleak life.

[halfshellvenus]

Oh, this is wonderfully bizarre and creepy. Soul-transfers into things that can't retain the soul forever, knowing that if it gives out suddenly your life is over... what a way to try to live.

The enforced silence, having no true vocal chords, the slipping away of context that makes Caterina etch their days into a stick because she can't remember on her own, just makes this dystopia feel bleaker and more vague. Well done!

[alien_writings]

This was a cool (and spooky!) concept. I enjoyed your story. :)