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lilywhitelilith

We'll shoot the generals on our own side

Apr 30, 2008 01:12

Title: We'll shoot the generals on our own side
Author: Telis (theaerosolkid)
Rating: PG-13
Pairing: Brendon/Audrey
Summary: The universe tends towards disorder.
Word Count: 995
Disclaimer: Fake, fake, fake.
A/N: Thanks to withoutmaps for the beta.

( i'm supposed to be a seasoned fighter (this feels like my first hit). )

brendon/audrey, pg-13

Comments 39

softlyforgotten April 30 2008, 08:53:15 UTC

honey, i have no idea how you do this, again and again; this blew me away, all 950 words of it. i started out thinking oh, i'm going to have to quote that back to her but it's basically the whole thing and i'm just; the way you get people! but oh, especially this:

"What's love got to do with it, baby?" Brendon asks and lets Ryan tuck him into bed.

eeek, it just, you break my heart. thank you for writing telis, it makes my days so much better. ♥

theaerosolkid May 4 2008, 09:37:03 UTC

I'm really glad you liked this -- writing Audrey is an interesting process for me, to say the least. ♥

self_sustaining April 30 2008, 10:26:59 UTC

So, somehow Audrey always managed to be my favorite. And this, sort of made me tear up and I'm not even sure why. I like it a lot. ♥

theaerosolkid May 4 2008, 09:37:16 UTC

Thanks, honey. <3

highschoolhussy April 30 2008, 13:05:02 UTC

Wow. Just. This was beautiful, and it hurt, and I love it.

theaerosolkid May 4 2008, 09:37:33 UTC

I'm glad! Thank you so much.

nyquil_love April 30 2008, 13:47:25 UTC

This was a really pretty story.
I've always liked Audrey, and from what I can tell, she seemed pretty happy with Brendon.

I like how Ryan is kind of a complete dick head in this story.
And, I loved the part about getting the hair to land in your eyes just right.

I also loved Audrey's reason for not wanting a tattoo. I certainly don't know her, but this seems like it could be a legitimate philosophy of hers.

theaerosolkid May 4 2008, 09:38:17 UTC

Thank you! The story really started taking shape in my mind when I thought about why Audrey wouldn't have any tattoos, so I'm especially glad that worked for you.

riflethrough April 30 2008, 13:56:50 UTC

I really love the way this story flows and the way it feels. I think my favorite part might have been the misunderstandings, when one said someone and the other heard something else.

theaerosolkid May 4 2008, 09:38:48 UTC

Thanks!

haha, totally my favourite part too oh god narcissism holla!