"Thanks for the ride, Commander," you say, and then wince slightly at your unintended double entendre. HOLY FUCK. I THINK YOU INTENDED ON KILLING ME, BTW. CUS YOU DID. *CONTINUES TO SNICKER*
Aww, bb! I loved this! I haven't read me any A/R fic in a while and you did gooooood. Not only was the sexy times good, it was very...how do I put it...tasteful? AWESOME? BEAUTIFUL IN ITS OWN SMUTTY WAY? Yesh. And IT WAS HOT! HOT HOT HOT. You do not know how HARD it was for me not to include some raptor!porn or some dancefloor!porn in this comment, but I thought I'd make it a nice, clean comment.
*side glances*
You really do need to write porn fic more often, because you have a lovely way with words. I know it takes a while, but I know I'd be grateful for some fic every now and then from you ;)
I'm taking a short break from packing and panicking! OMG! IT'S ALMOST HEEEEEERE! I'LL SEE YOU IN LIKE 24 HOURS! LESS PROBABLY! WE'LL BE ON THE BUS IN 24 HOURS AND 30 MINUTES! SQUEE!!! MAKING PORNY NOISES WHILE WATCHING... A/R PORN! LOL
ANYWAY...
HOLY FUCK. I THINK YOU INTENDED ON KILLING ME, BTW. CUS YOU DID. *CONTINUES TO SNICKER*
FLAMO!! ;) It just came to me. LOL I thought you might appreciate it. ;)
But seriously, bb, I'm so glad you read and enjoyed and encouraged me and all that. (And hey, where do you think I got the inspiration for the dance floor and raptor porn prompts for you? LOL)
I am writing. Slowly. I have written 3 successful lines so far. GO ME. I have no idea how to write about Gel Permeation Chromatography though :S AND YES. I WILL BE WITH YOU THIS TIME TOMORROW. OMFG.
FLAMO!! ;) It just came to me. LOL I thought you might appreciate it. ;) lol YOUR THOUGHTS WERE INDEED CORRECT. AND FLAMO IS MY NEW FAVOURITE WORD. I JUST WANT TO SHOUT IT. LOUDLY.
My encouragement is ALWAYS there *nods* and, YEY FOR PROMPTS. We will discuss prompts tomorrow. I CAN SAY THAT. I CAN SAY I WILL TALK TO YOU TOMORROW HAHAHAHAAAA.
I really appreciate that. I don't know why I started writing this in 2nd person, but it felt right from how the story came to me, and then it just happened. I'm so glad it worked for you. :)
And yeah, I hear you. I've written for very few fandoms (and only ever read for the same ones), but A/R is definitely one of those pairings that just sucks me in. I could not love them more than I do.
It's been posted to Survival Instinct, but it has yet to go through. Since it's my first fic over there, it'll probably take a few days, but it should pop up soon. :)
Again, thanks so much for reading and commenting! It's always completely nerve-wracking posting your first fic in a fandom. :)
Word to what i_paint_the_sky said. I detest 2nd person POV in fic and usually stop reading immediately when I encounter it. But this was so gorgeous that I didn't even notice the POV until 3/4 of the way through... by which time I was hooked. And very impressed. Really lovely work!
And like I just told i_paint_the_sky, I really appreciate that. I don't usually write in 2nd person (nor is it usually my favorite type of POV either), but it simply came to me that way for some reason. I'm really glad it worked for you. :) Thanks so much for reading and commenting. :)
Aww, wow, this was great!! Love how you described the sexual tension rising between them during the dance, leading up to the hot smuttiness in the raptor. And Laura's 'thank you' had me laughing out loud. And then the end was really touching. Well done :)
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"Thanks for the ride, Commander," you say, and then wince slightly at your unintended double entendre.
HOLY FUCK. I THINK YOU INTENDED ON KILLING ME, BTW. CUS YOU DID. *CONTINUES TO SNICKER*
Aww, bb! I loved this! I haven't read me any A/R fic in a while and you did gooooood. Not only was the sexy times good, it was very...how do I put it...tasteful? AWESOME? BEAUTIFUL IN ITS OWN SMUTTY WAY? Yesh. And IT WAS HOT! HOT HOT HOT. You do not know how HARD it was for me not to include some raptor!porn or some dancefloor!porn in this comment, but I thought I'd make it a nice, clean comment.
*side glances*
You really do need to write porn fic more often, because you have a lovely way with words. I know it takes a while, but I know I'd be grateful for some fic every now and then from you ;)
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ANYWAY...
HOLY FUCK. I THINK YOU INTENDED ON KILLING ME, BTW. CUS YOU DID. *CONTINUES TO SNICKER*
FLAMO!! ;) It just came to me. LOL I thought you might appreciate it. ;)
But seriously, bb, I'm so glad you read and enjoyed and encouraged me and all that. (And hey, where do you think I got the inspiration for the dance floor and raptor porn prompts for you? LOL)
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FLAMO!! ;) It just came to me. LOL I thought you might appreciate it. ;)
lol YOUR THOUGHTS WERE INDEED CORRECT. AND FLAMO IS MY NEW FAVOURITE WORD. I JUST WANT TO SHOUT IT. LOUDLY.
My encouragement is ALWAYS there *nods* and, YEY FOR PROMPTS. We will discuss prompts tomorrow. I CAN SAY THAT. I CAN SAY I WILL TALK TO YOU TOMORROW HAHAHAHAAAA.
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That was brilliant! XD
And we both now have fic comms. We are AWESOME! XD
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AND WE ARE. LOL
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And yeah, I hear you. I've written for very few fandoms (and only ever read for the same ones), but A/R is definitely one of those pairings that just sucks me in. I could not love them more than I do.
It's been posted to Survival Instinct, but it has yet to go through. Since it's my first fic over there, it'll probably take a few days, but it should pop up soon. :)
Again, thanks so much for reading and commenting! It's always completely nerve-wracking posting your first fic in a fandom. :)
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And then the end was really touching. Well done :)
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