Biiiiiiiirthdaaaaaaaayfiiiiiiiiiiiiiic!!!

[llassah]

Brynn, I looove yoooooou! (don't worry, the extended vowels won't feature in the fic. They aren't zombies- braaaaaaaaaaaains!) I enclose my HEART! Or maybe just an experimental fic. I hope you have an amazingly wonderful biiiiirthday, you're one of my FAVOURITES!

Author: llassah
Fandom: due South
Pairing: Ray/Ray
Length: 1600 words
Rating: NC-17

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Comments

[slidellra]

♥! This is gorgeous and wonderful and painful good and I LOVE Brynn's birthday.

Is it "holster" you want instead of "halter"? I am unfamiliar with zis halter you speak of, in this context.

[llassah]

Thank yoou! ♥. It's kind of ridiculously angsty if you think about it *happysigh*. I'm glad you like it \o/

ahahahahahahahaa, thank you! Man I'm truly special. Um...he was wearing a HALTER NECK, OKAY? Don't judge him, he wants to show off his shoulders and doesn't need to wear a bra!

[slidellra]

It's deliciously, smolderingly angsty. I love it.

I googled "gun halter" because there things I don't know about guns, right? This could be one of them! I got "see a bonus reel with the buxom vixens utilizing their machine-gun halter tops." Which. YEAH OKAY SURE.

[sdwolfpup]

This was fantastic. The rich, dark atmosphere of the last part was great.

[llassah]

Thank you! And thank you for setting this up- this fic was something I've wanted to write for some time. I'm glad the atmosphere worked for you.

[troyswann]

This is so terrific. The progression and Kowalski's matter-of-fact intelligence, Ray's willingness to accept it, all are beautifully articulated in such spare, evocative language.

This, for instance--Ray looks at him, startled, wanting to say something, anything but sounding angry is a lie and sounding like he wants this is...unwise. He stays silent. Kowalski’s eyes are huge, pupils blown.

And this kind of made me feel teary:

they’ve never been friends, but they somehow manage to not kill each other. He gets some takeout coffee and doughnuts, picks up a packet of candy for Kowalski and counts six into his cup, then puts the rest of the packet into his pocket. Kowalski blinks, surprised, when he sips the coffee, then spends the rest of the stakeout arguing about frosting on doughnuts.

As does this: he says, and keeps saying. Perfect ending.

I agree: Brynn's birthday is excellent!

[llassah]

wow, thank you so much (I get this ridiculously hero-worshippy thing when you comment on things of mine ♥). I was aiming for Ray being...drifting, and RayK being the one who takes control of things, because I love RayK being the capable one, so I'm happy that worked.

And the last line was the first thing I thought of, and I, uh, dug it, so I sort of tailored the fic around it.

I am a supporter of brynn's birthday \o/

[brooklinegirl]

this is fucking GORGEOUS. Seriously, every word FLOWS and you get in Ray's head so perfectly, and I just tried to pick out my favorite parts, but ALL of it is my favorite, every bit, though the last line:

“Kowalski, I have this habit,” he says, and keeps saying.

just about killed me dead. SO much love.

[catwalksalone]

Everything that those clever people articulated. *points up*

I just. Every single word you choose has purpose. You say more in 1600 words than many can say in 5000, 10000 (I include myself in those numbers).

You play your audience as beautifully as you play your instruments, my darling. You amaze me.