Teach me how to fuck

[lovekibummie]

Title: Teach me how to fuck
Author: lovekibummie
Pairing: KyuMin
Rating: NC-17
Genre: Romance, Incest, Smut
Summary: Their parents told them to teach Kyuhyun whatever he needs to learn, they’re just obeying them.
A/N: My first fail attempt of writing yaoi smut. -.- So yeah, suggestion and comments please. I know it’s not that good so tell me how to

Comments

[kyumin86eunhae]

Everytime I read 'incest' in the description, I actually expect angst but this wasn't angsty at all LOL
So... since you were asking for honest critism, I'm giving it now, okay?
Despite some grammar mistakes (mostly the usage of the wrong tense... you switch between simple past and simple present a lot) your writing style really has potential :D
The smut made me feel like wooooohoooo so it must be good LOL
Grammar errors don't disturb me in smuts because I just need to imagine the whole scene in front of my eyes so the words just have to be chosen right, but it's getting risky in other genre's like crack or angst >.<
Thank you anyway for this, I enjoyed it :D (incest!KyuMin-> perfect)

[lovekibummie]

i actually felt tired reading angst fics nowadays.. so yeah.. :p
most of my friends noticed that too.. i tend to shift tenses without noticing it.. -.-
so it means i better take note of that again... thanks for pointing it out..
thank you again for your honest critism ^^

[wince90]

ayy smutty kyumin brothers!~ :3

[lovekibummie]

^^

[simbasheart]

I.LOVE.DIS!

freaking incest is hawt!!!

one of my faves from ur works ♥

[lovekibummie]

thanks hunnie.. ^^

[lovekibummie]

/NODS... she needs to be specific actually.. :p
thank you!!

[pumpkinpurin]

fgijoitnoigosmogtimos

/dying caused bloodloss

[lovekibummie]

gives you bags of blood.. :p
thanks for reading.. ^^