Fictionwriters? Why u do dis?

[lytrigian]

I wrote this and decided it was too harsh for the fictionwriters  group -- it's not writers_guild , after all -- but I had to put it SOMEPLACE.

The post in question is here, which links to this story

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Hi.

[yummiexperoxide]

Thank you, this is actually very helpful, whether you intended it to be or not. I get it, I've made mistakes I have yet to fix.

(I really do know Baltimore is not in New Jersey. I forgot to go back and change some info. And I am an American.)

Re: Hi.

[lytrigian]

O.o

I didn't f-lock this, but I'm surprised you found it.

I did intend it to be helpful, and had you posted to writers_guild I wouldn't have hesitated. It's a community focused on critique, and this is a fairly average (if somewhat ranty) specimen. fictionwriters isn't so tolerant. It's just that by the time I was done with it and realized it wasn't really suitable for the community, it became something I had to vent about

Re: Hi.

[yummiexperoxide]

This is what I wanted. Thank you. Well, I mean I'm sorry this happens so much that you have to rant about it but I think that it is the perfect review.

I'm a sophmore in high school and don't have a lot of time to actually think my writing though clearly and that's what my post was for, so I could get some helpful feedback. I'm glad you completely dismantled my faults, it gives me something to build up on. So again, thank you.

The post you read was the original, *original* draft that I thought was my newer one that is changed a bit. Guess I kind of screwed that one up, huh? *facepalm*

Oh yeah, Joey is British.

Re: Hi.

[yummiexperoxide]

Oh, on how I found this. There was that pingback bot thing, it put a comment on my post that said you had linked it to yours. So I checked it out.

[orotaku]

ahaha, i remember doing this when i was a nub starting out, back in the early teens. that said, i've a horrendous bad habit of doing drabbles that don't ever get rewritten or proof-read (like the stuff i spouted out for OW) if only because that was for fun, and felt it didn't deserve my nitpicking. i do go back and fix errors and reread a few times, and certainly i research but i daresay i've not gone back and thoroughly ripped apart my own works... i guess largely because i'm a whimsical, sporadic writer and when i focus too hard on making a piece 'perfect' it tends to lose its appeal to me, and then i get frustrated and it goes downhill from there till i break from it for weeks.

you make me wish i could sit down and work on the novella i've had in my head for a while. i bounce the ideas on the drive from work but fear actually sitting down and writing it. it's so nice in my head but i worry about reflecting it into text. one day, maybe. when warcraft doesn't eat my soul.

[lytrigian]

It's gotta be gaming. My productivity went WAAAAY down once I started with Mabi. Now that I'm getting a little bored with it (and online gaming in general: WoW is more an obsessive-compulsive thing than genuinely interesting, although that may change if more OW people show up) I might get my own stories rolling again.

I really may have bitten off more than I can chew with this next one I have plotted though. Multiple parallel storylines; palace intrigue; politicking by violence in the gladiator pits; oppression, civil war, and rebellion in a desert city-state; deep-cover espionage; assassination.... When I put it that way, I'm not sure I can do a good job with it.