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bottleofred May 27 2004, 15:27:50 UTC
First glance editorial (no more; I'm tired):

"In shared jubilee" => "In shared jubilation"

Pugs => Pugg's

[Uncertain about whether to keep following sentence] ?

Will the Buffy/Southpark/Balding Wookie references over-alienate the audience?

They _didn't_ shag, did they? It's a little unclear. In any case: a sober person sleeping with a bra on is unlikely.

-BoR

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