The Deadly Duel

[magazhchi]

Thousands of spectators thronged the stadium; many taking a journey of weeks together to reach the place of the duel. The Queen had challenged a novice archer ‘Lavanya’ who had smitten the King by her bravery. Rumors were that the girl was not even sixteen but had bravely fought the tiger to save The King. The King in return had announced to bestow

Comments

[i_17bingo]

Nice twist about the king at the end there. This was an exciting piece.

[magazhchi]

Thank you. Happy to know you found it exciting. Writing about the duel without giving away the details was difficult.

[aniron_iorhael]

Very interesting duel and nice twist at the end.

[magazhchi]

Thank you. Happy to know it worked.

[rayaso]

I loved the end! The king deserved to die if he was stupid enough to sit in the line of fire. The rules were interesting. It did not seem to begin with simultaneous shots, so whoever got to shoot first had a real advantage.

[magazhchi]

Thank you. I struggled to make the battle a little clear. The queen's strategy was to move Lavanya towards the left in the first two attempts so that The King becomes an unknowing target.

"whoever got to shoot first had a real advantage." It did cross my mind midway while writing. I might think of editing it later. Thanks for pointing it out.

Happy to know you enjoyed reading it.*smiles*

[beldarzfixon]

I do like a good twist. Well played

[magazhchi]

Thank you. Happy to know you enjoyed reading it.

[halfshellvenus]

This was an interesting setup (I liked the gender reversal), and the twist at the end as well. I'm sorry the Queen herself was killed, but ultimately the country wound up in better hands.

[magazhchi]

*Smiles* Yeah, more power to females. Happy to know it worked for you. Thank you.