LJ Idol Week 3

[magenta_girl]

In Another Castle

Comments

[i_17bingo]

I always wonder what goes through my wife's head when I have a breakdown. This probably brings me one step closer.

[majesticzaichik]

Tip for posting things on the internet- you really need to leave spaces between paragraphs. Your entry is so hard to read, that it deters me from voting for it, regardless of the content. I doubt I'm the only one who feels like that, even though I'll be the only one telling you. Hope you fix that next week.

[magenta_girl]

Thanks for letting me know.

[alexpgp]

Like it.

Lots of potential for expansion, don't you think?

[magenta_girl]

Thank you. I may expand at some point.

[eternal_ot]

this is so sad..and could be someone's reality...could captured it well..

[magenta_girl]

Thank you.

[halfshellvenus]

I liked the structure of how you relayed this, with the present and then a dip to the past and then back to the present again.

The wife here... is clearly unhappy at home. Whether she has depression or just isn't suited to that particular life, something needs to change for her.

[magenta_girl]

Thank you. And yes, you are right about the wife.