Indulgence (HP)

[magstopia]

TITLE: Indulgence
RATING: PG-13
SUMMARY: A girl, a boy, and an enchanted boat.
NOTES: This is a PWP in the Plot? What Plot? sense of the acronym, set near the end of Ginny's 7th year at Hogwarts. I felt like writing a scene that emphasized description and mood more than anything else. I also had a craving to write Harry/Ginny, though this shouldn'

Comments

[jheanne]

*squeeeeeeees*

Ok, I'll go read this fic now.

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*fans self* Lovely. I've missed your writing. I love the boat and how they're relaxing and the tentacle of the Giant Squid and the ending.

A girl and a boy lie stretched out nearly the length of the boat's keel, basking in the sunlight. The boy is asleep, his head pillowed on the girl's stomach, mouth slightly agape, hands folded across his chest. His glasses sit askew on his nose. The girl is awake, reading, one hand holding her book at an angle to block the sun's glare, the other idly tracing a zigzag mark on her companion's brow. They look relaxed, untroubled, peaceful. Enchanted.

It's so picturesque. I loved the feeling of this fic: "relaxed, untroubled, peaceful."

[magglenagall]

I've missed my writing too! This dry spell has gone on far too long. Writing this was like slipping on a favorite pair of pajamas. Thanks for being here with your squeeing - you made me feel as though I haven't completely lost my touch. *loves*

[govcampbell]

*grins* I loved this. It's so sweet, and makes me think of summer, which is way to slow in coming.

Thanks for writing!

[magglenagall]

Thanks, Gov! I totally agree with you about summer - my bones are crying out for sunshine and warmth. :-) Thanks for reviewing!

[lyras]

*sighs happily* I read this with a huge smile on my face. You really do set the atmosphere well (I love the clouds "lounging" across the sky), and the quiet relaxation of the boat bobbing on the water, with Harry asleep on Ginny's lap is gorgeous.

[magglenagall]

Thank you so much! Atmosphere and setting is one of the aspects I love most about writing. It's been so long since I last wrote anything, much less H/G, that it was so refreshing to dabble around in it once again for a bit.

(I love the clouds "lounging" across the sky)
This comment really made my day, because I looked long and hard to find just the right word to describe the way I was picturing this particular detail.

Thanks so much for reviewing!

[still_infinity]

This is a new story? There's hoping. :)

I loved the introduction. How we (the readers) are slowly eased into the setting and not thrown directly in the middle of the action. It reminded me a bit of Idyll.
I loved how there is nothing really happening but still there is so much said about Harry and Ginny and their relationship.

What a treat to wake up to.

Have a lovely Sunday!

[magglenagall]

LOL, don't hope too hard! I just felt a craving to revisit familiar old haunts for a brief spell. I'm especially glad you liked the way I structured the narrative. I usually stick with a single POV - especially in a scene as short as this one - and was worried the shift might be too clumsy or jarring.

Thanks so much for reviewing!

[flyingcarpet]

YAY!!! I love this. I love that Harry and Ginny are in their own little world together, but that you also brought in the bird, the squid, and the castle as outside elements. And I'd say that your experiment with description worked beautifully -- it was so rich and textured, I could picture everything about this one little moment in time.

And in conclusion, YAY!!!

[magglenagall]

YAY, I totally thought of you while I was writing this. Clearly you need to get your feathers ruffled more often, because I can totally write out of spite. :-P

*loves you*