Title: RetrospectAuthor: adaman_t Genres: Angst/Romance Rating: M Warnings: Angst and sex awaits you. Word Count: 3, 654 Summary: In retrospect, Mai should have seen this coming.
Most fics addressing this issue (meaning, how Zuko had to leave her) end up feeling stupid, cliche, and cheesy. THANK YOU for writing an EXCELLENT one! The section where Mai reads the letter is my favorite, especially the line, "Mai took this opportunity to break, well aware that another would not be given to her. She wouldn't be permitted to cry after this, not with Azula breathing down her neck." I also love your description of Zuko's choice to write the letter
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Aha, no, thank you for the wonderful feedback! I'm so glad you enjoyed it! :D I love angst, and I completely agree, some of it is usually really cheesy regarding this flawless pair. I'm really happy I didn't fall into that category, haha.
to be honest, i skimmed though the retellings of the canonical scenes, cos i'm wierd and purist that way, but i love love love this bit here:
"Paralyzed, Zuko numbly added another item to his accumulating list of failures.
He had failed to protect the one person that mattered."
AWWWWWWWWWWWwwwwww.... *cuddles zuko plushie*
you're not the first to write his sense of failiure into the scene, but unlike many other fics, the build-up to this was powerful enough that this bit hit me like a brick to the head.
excellent storytelling <3
(also love the sex, wahahaha... its wickedly nice how you started slow and had it gradually build.) :DD
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to be honest, i skimmed though the retellings of the canonical scenes, cos i'm wierd and purist that way, but i love love love this bit here:
"Paralyzed, Zuko numbly added another item to his accumulating list of failures.
He had failed to protect the one person that mattered."
AWWWWWWWWWWWwwwwww.... *cuddles zuko plushie*
you're not the first to write his sense of failiure into the scene, but unlike many other fics, the build-up to this was powerful enough that this bit hit me like a brick to the head.
excellent storytelling <3
(also love the sex, wahahaha... its wickedly nice how you started slow and had it gradually build.) :DD
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