you do write beautifully a lot of the time, so I have mixed feelings about putting this comment on this particular entry especially, but...I'm taking a teaching of writing class this semester, so hit me up if you ever want advice. your sentences are not too long. you overuse fragments just slightly, but nothing else about your writing can be quantified...
you and I are just never there at the same time -- I visit her every couple of weeks. :) check facebook and maybe you can come visit here, though...richard might be coming, and becca and ben probably will, and some other people as well.
Not about your writing: I'm at a loss here about whats going on with marijuana. I can't tell if they've fallen in love with it or just the idea of it. In okinawa(not sure about the rest of Japan) the cool music has become reggae and rap, and the more pot references the better. I try to ask my Seniinkai friends if they know if people smoke it here or not, and I get replies of "Smoke weed every day!" and other pot references. I've also been told that the town on Iheya that I live in is nicknamed "Ganja" short for Gakiya
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I could definitely see an area as rural as your's being ok with pot. But yea, I noticed the whole "pot is cool but it's horrible and degenerates society" contradiction when I was in Japan too.
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your sentences are not too long. you overuse fragments just slightly, but nothing else about your writing can be quantified...
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this is the only part that confused me. it made me relate your job with "kissing guys with beards" but i guess the next part of the sentence fixed it?
you're a pretty good writer, and sentence length doesn't really matter if you use punctuation correctly, which you do
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