Identity and Boldly Blessed Attraction (III)

[marcellapolman]

Title: Identity and Boldly Blessed Attraction (III): Fraser & Ray
Pairing: Fraser/Kowalski
Rating: NC-17 (clothes come off)
Size: about 10,500 words
Summary: Three undercover gigs. Disco. A lot of dead gay men. More disco. Fraser behaving very out of character. Ray being dazed and confused. And Welsh….What the fuck is wrong with Welsh?

Comments

[thady]

Ooh, this is great! I really, really loved this. *flails* And the song titles. So fitting. *sigh*

Sorry, I can't give a more coherent feedback now, but I love this. :)

[marcellapolman]

Thank you. Really, a very coherent thanks to you :)

[mezzo_cammin]

That was just wonderful!! Several times I laughed out loud, and then I got a little choked up, and then mmmmm, with the lovin'...I will definitely put this is a folder to be read again. Thanks so much for writing it! :)

[marcellapolman]

Hey, thank you kindly.

[leslieo54]

“I beg to differ, Ray. Breakfast is a very factual meal.”

It's all so awesome. Seriously, it's one of those stories where you want to quote your favorite lines, but you realize the comment would be longer than the story if you did... One thing I especially loved was Welsh - both his *actual* actions in keeping the boys at the homosexual drinking establishment, and the way he appeared in Ray's head.

Ray bet that Welsh often told him, “Detective Vecchio, that’s a mighty fine case report you turned in this morning. And I’d like to take this opportunity to congratulate you on its timeliness.”

To Ray the Lieu said stuff like, “Detective, something strange has happened. I’m missing twenty-four of your case reports. I’m sure they have been on my desk, ‘cause you promised to turn them in this morning, but they have all gone. Solve this case for me please. By noon.”

Thanks for sharing!

[marcellapolman]

Thanks for commenting. Glad you liked it :)

[buzzylittleb]

*grin*

A happy ending to all the angst and then there's sex and matchmaker!Welsh.

One niggle:
The bed was a mess, but it was a matrimonial.
You mean a bed big enough for two people? A double, or given that Americans like them roomy, maybe a queen or a king.

[marcellapolman]

Thanks for the comment.

About the matrimonial/double thing: you are right. When I was thinking about the sentence, 'double' seemed more American to me, but during the holidays I spent in South America, it turned out that hotels considered a 'double' a room with two beds, so I thought: better safe than sorry and I put 'matrimonial'. I should have figured that South America is different from the USA and I should have done more research. Thanks for pointing out the niggle: I'll change it.

[indywind]

There are so many funny parts in this! It seems like you may have struggled a little to find Ray's own particular idiom, especially at the beginning, but as it goes on, he gets some absolutely brilliant lines. Nice work.

And what an interesting way to take on the Ray/Stan/Frase/Ben muddle.

[marcellapolman]

Thanks for the comment.

For the benefit of my future writing: could you elaborate a little on Ray's voice not being Ray's voice at the beginning of the story? I'd really like to learn more about characterization. Thanks in advance. M.