The Real LJ Idol * Season 11 * Week 20: Boondoggle

[marlawentmad]

We stood heel to heel

Comments

[bleodswean]

YOWCH!!! This is something crazy amazing! Dark and compelling. I loved how you layered and layered, luring the reader to the edge with your narrator. Gorgeously done. And very painful but also infuriating.

[rayaso]

I agree with Bleodswean - the adding of layers was wonderful. You did a fantastic job of describing the kind of "lover" who does not truly love, but keeps adding conditions. I especially liked the next-to-last stanza.

[karmasoup]

Oh gosh. Honey. You and I could sure swap some notes. Living this reality is a nightmare. And I know, because I finally awakened from it a few years ago. It does still haunt me at times. I haven't channeled this pain into the exquisite beauty you create, though... probably need a few more years to breathe first.

[d0gs]

I love how this says so much!

[flipflop_diva]

Wow. This is really, really powerful. And it just goes to show how strong the narrator (you?) really are!