Comments | mckaysmonkey: SGA Story: Guardians of Pegasus part 1

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SGA Story: Guardians of Pegasus part 1

Mar 12, 2013 19:37

TITLE: Guardians of Pegasus.
FANDOM: Stargate Atlantis
PAIRING: John Shepard/Rodney McKay (mention of Jack O’Neill/Daniel Jackson)
WORD COUNT: 2723
RATING: R
WARNINGS: Vampires. Biting. Possible spoilers for rising?

Notes:

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Comments 25

popkin16 March 13 2013, 09:12:22 UTC

What a fascinating world you've created here! I love your take on the vampire myth (that so much of what we believe to be true - garlic, mirrors, etc. - is a lie). I like the idea of them being guardians :) And poor Rodney, he smells so good to vampires (as well he should, as he is delicious looking too!). Jack obviously knows about John, though John's involvement with the SGC is questionable. Does he know John because John's been assigned to McMurdo, because Jack knows John's grandfather, or what? It'll be fascinating to find out! Somehow, I don't think he'll be able to keep John away from Rodney :P

Poor Rodney; he thinks he's only ever wanted for his blood :( I also love the Jack/Daniel you threw in, as well as the fact that Jack's a vampire and Rodney knows about them!

mckaysmonkey March 13 2013, 17:43:12 UTC

Thanks:-)

Poor Rodney has some odd genetic twists in his DNA and one of the side effects is that he smells particularly good to vampires. It's fairly rare, so John hasn't met anyone like him before. Hence he doesn't pick up on the significance of what it means.

I wanted to create the impression that John and Rodney were drawn together by something stronger than normal attraction, that neither of them were in full control of their actions.

Yes, Jack's comment there at the end is a great big hint that he already knows John. In the original draft Jack was a friend of the Sheppard family, but I rather like the idea that Jack is John's grandfather.

John knows Jack needs him for some special mission, but not the details. He thinks he's already messed up by getting sent to McMurdo. However Jack has a cunning plan. Except now John has messed up things by meeting Rodney too soon. Ooops!

popkin16 March 15 2013, 11:43:27 UTC

Ooo, so that's why vampires are drawn to Rodney. Poor guy - he'll be forever uncertain if a vampire truly wants him for him, and not for his smell.

Oh wow, I really like the idea of Jack being John's grandfather too. But whatever way you end up writing this, it'll be damn amazing!

John knows Jack needs him for some special mission, but not the details. He thinks he's already messed up by getting sent to McMurdo. However Jack has a cunning plan. Except now John has messed up things by meeting Rodney too soon.

Ooooo. Poor John, thinking he's messed up already. And Poor Jack too, because John's thrown a wrench in his plans!

mckaysmonkey March 16 2013, 00:20:51 UTC

Pt 2 is up now, so you can find out what those plans were :-)

Brilliant!! ....... Give me more! paleom March 13 2013, 18:32:23 UTC

Hey Monkey,
This is brilliant - I'd say it's your best work. The characters are spot on and you've got Rodney to a T. It reads so smoothly and I love the sandpit you're playing in and I can't wait to see how it all unfolds.

Eager for more. Really, really good fic!

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Re: Brilliant!! ....... Give me more! mckaysmonkey March 13 2013, 19:03:13 UTC

Thanks hon. Good news by the way. Just been checking through part 4 and it turned out I have done all but one of J's suggested edits. It turns out that pt 4 grew so long I moved the chapter break so all the bits I'm unhappy about are in parts 5 and 6. So I've actually got 4 parts to post, not 3.

Re: Brilliant!! ....... Give me more! paleom March 14 2013, 08:19:55 UTC

That's great news. Look forward to seeing it unfold.

The way it ends with Jack's 'Well Damn' made me wonder if the Sheppard family was Vampire royalty and I figure Rodney's 'smell' gives the vampires something special or extra powers/energy judging by how many want it.

Little sad though that everyone's just after his blood (makes a difference from his mind. LOL) but I'm sure you're gonna fix all that with some good ole McShep. **bounces**

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Re: Brilliant!! ....... Give me more! mckaysmonkey March 14 2013, 17:42:01 UTC

Jack's comment is a hint for what's coming in pt 2. Jack can't keep his word, and keep Sheppard away from McKay, as it will mess up certain plans ...

I don't think the Vampires have royalty, although they would have a hierarchy.

adafrog March 14 2013, 02:48:42 UTC

Interesting. I want to know more.

mckaysmonkey March 14 2013, 07:55:15 UTC

Thanks. I cleaned up pt2 last night, so there's more to come.

kitchyy March 14 2013, 06:53:58 UTC

“Well, you know Beckett‘s theory…” Jack started to explain.

“What, that the Ancients intermarried with humans and passed on the gene? But that doesn’t make any sense.

I absolutely love this idea, and I want to read more of this! I like a good vampire fic, and you've got SG-1 in here too, which makes me all kinds of happy.

All in all, great first chappie!

mckaysmonkey March 14 2013, 08:00:22 UTC

Thanks. This is mostly going to be John/Rodney, but Jack and Daniel will be making an appearance in the next part:-)

rissabby March 14 2013, 06:57:14 UTC

I like it.
You've really got me wondering why Rodney smells so good.
I'm looking forward to reading more.

mckaysmonkey March 14 2013, 18:05:50 UTC

thanks. I don't want to spoil it for you, but the general idea is that the Ancients and vampires have some shared genetics e.g. the ATA and vampires tend to be strongly attracted to anyone descended from the ancients. Rodney has a scent only vampires are sensitive to that marks him as a descendent of the Ancients. The vampires think he may have inherited more than just a latent ATA gene ...