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[megs2911]

Hm... ok, let's try this

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[_crayola_skies]

tropic - of cancer
white - head
eye - shut
sync - rhythm
print - magazine

Captured

[dauber1football]

In the ever-present hustle of the day,
my heart, it will not change.

As you venture on and you face each day,
my heart, it will not sway.

While I wait, while you chase another day,
this remains: your beauty has caused my heart to stay.

[pyrobynite]

tropic-of Cancer
white-walls
eye-big
sync-together
print-form of writing

In the blink of an eye
my life changed.
As you talked and listened
my heart swayed.
While I live, while you live,
this remains: love.

In Time

[_crayola_skies]

In the course of time
my thoughts change.

As you draw away and whither,
my mind does not sway.

While I grow, while you remain the same,
this remains: I do not need you anymore.

Re: In Time

[_crayola_skies]

I like how in the last stanza you didn't use repetition but two opposites to express what has happened "in time." The more common approach, I would imagine, is to use the same thing.

Re: In Time

[_crayola_skies]

n/m dauber did the same thing

maybe its 50/50

meghan and i did the same thing

you and jayson did the same thing

let's see what megan does....*rubs palms together*

[anonymous]

In the absence of forgiving you
my heart has begun to change.

As you speak in truth and honesty,
my thoughts hear emnity and I sway.

While I cry, while you cry,
this remains: Three strands of cord
are not quickly broken.

~Bethany Bruening