i wrote fic wat

[mermaidfangs]

wat i wrote a thing last night!

i'm posting it here because i'd like to keep it locked for now. it's mostly kara/laura, with kara/leoben and kara/helena but not in a rightship sort of way. other characters that show up: hmmm, kendra and lee.

warnings for: underage, sexual violence, general unhappiness, references to drug abuse

it's 4700 words.

Comments

[astreamofstars]

Of course I don't hate you!

I already told you what I think about this fic, and you told me off last time for saying it twice (:P), so I won't repeat it all. I'll just say that it's even more beautiful now you tidied it up, and I ache for them both, all over again.

[mermaidfangs]

I didn't tell you off, hee! I just didn't want you to feel pressured to comment twice <3

[mermaidfangs]

Thank you, sweetling. Angsty but ultimately hopeful, that's what I aim for. I've been feeling really attracted to the first-person lately...I think it's harder for people to get into, but sometimes it can be so much easier to write when somebody is telling their own story.

Thank you so much for reading and commenting, bb.

[word_vomity]

Read & loved. I will say words later. Right now I'm just feeling feelings. *hugs*

[mermaidfangs]

<3 <3 *huggles* so glad you read, sweetheart.

[larsfarm77]

I loved this. It's hurtful, crude, intimate and honest, in a way that comes together into something beautiful. I loved Kara's perspective, especially this:

I never bother with sorry’s because I know from experience they are meaningless. How do you apologise for complete and utter disaster? What words mend catastrophe?

Very cool! The only thing it's missing is more :D

[mermaidfangs]

Thank you so much for reading and commenting. These two set off all my angst buttons in the best possible way, so I enjoy seeing them all frail and raw and their trousers down. I'm especially glad the perspective worked. <3 <3 Thanks again!

[word_vomity]

There were so many lines that moved me in this piece I couldn't pick just a couple.

Her face flushes rose, and I knot up because I forgot not to be crude, again, and I wonder what’s the politest way to say I want to shove my tongue inside you and feel your come damp on my cheeks.

Every sentence that I think or utter in relation to her starts with, I want.

People are all the same, even the good ones.

because because.

I like to imagine the gods as people with inflated egos. If I say, “I’m invincible,” enough times, it will become true.

I never bother with sorry’s because I know from experience they are meaningless. How do you apologise for complete and utter disaster?

I have tattoos over my scars. I have tattoos everywhere.

We are both of us bundles of quiet need.I really like what you did with Kara and Lee too. Like a lot

[mermaidfangs]

<3 thank you so much, lovely.it's kind of you to say all those things. it's heartening that the writing resonated, as i was afraid it was either over-the-top or too messy or something. you know? so i'm glad it clicked for you. you always say the nicest things and i don't deserve them i don't. <3 *hugs*