My final paper for College Writing 2. Write a short story, poem, or play inspired by an author we read during the class AND write a short essay on the writing process
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It doesn't look quite so cramped in the MS Word version, I just threw it onto the lj client.
As far as Alex and Jerry go, their conflict wasn't really the point of the story, so I felt no need to go further into it. There's not really a sense of closure, and that's what I wanted, for it to feel like the ending was frayed and abrupt.
The ending also originally had no dialogue, at all. I actually liked this more, as it contributed to the otherworldly, bizarre feeling of finding this cabin (which, if you didn't realize, has some sentimental value to the parents) in complete ruins, but it ultimately detracted from the story; the reader needed to see the family's reaction up close.
How repelled the parents were from each other towards the end is up for interpretation. I'm not entirely sure myself why I emphasized it.
At any rate, this is due in 20 minutes, so it's a bit late to be making corrections. Thanks for your comments, I'm quite happy with the way it turned out and so is my professor ^_^
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As far as Alex and Jerry go, their conflict wasn't really the point of the story, so I felt no need to go further into it. There's not really a sense of closure, and that's what I wanted, for it to feel like the ending was frayed and abrupt.
The ending also originally had no dialogue, at all. I actually liked this more, as it contributed to the otherworldly, bizarre feeling of finding this cabin (which, if you didn't realize, has some sentimental value to the parents) in complete ruins, but it ultimately detracted from the story; the reader needed to see the family's reaction up close.
How repelled the parents were from each other towards the end is up for interpretation. I'm not entirely sure myself why I emphasized it.
At any rate, this is due in 20 minutes, so it's a bit late to be making corrections. Thanks for your comments, I'm quite happy with the way it turned out and so is my professor ^_^
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