#13b Back To Basics

[mimithemuse]

Title: A Gallop To Remember
Word Count: 240
Rating: G
Original/Fandom: Original Novel: The Prodigal Equestrienne
Pairings (if any): Violet/Charlie
Warnings (Non-Con/Dub-Con/RPF etc): None
Summary Violet shares the passion of her life with the man she loves.
Link to Original: http://wv- ( Read more... )

Comments

[serendipityxxi]

Oh what a perfect comparison - love to galloping! The freedom and wild exhilaration of it! Very nice :) You kind of break the link by separating that into two sentences at the end there though. I'm not sure how you'd reword to make it tighter and not go into run-on territory. Also, I thought they were coming up on the hill rather than at the start of the field when they started so you might want to clear that up a bit more. You've done a great job giving the horses personality and showing the joy the two have out there riding together. :)

ETA: Here via writerverse ;)