SasuNaru - Sparring - 1/1

[missingairmail]

Title: Sparring 1/1
Author: missingairmail
Pairing: SasuNaru if you want to see it.
Rating: PG - 13 Mild language and licking, but it's not explicit. *smiles*
Word Count: 1,228
Warnings: This is a rather difficult style to read, so if you don't like what you see in the exert, it'd be best to turn around. Sorry to those who don't like it; this is the easiest and

Comments

[anonymous]

yum. very yum. :) Refreshingly understated angst and affection.

[missingairmail]

Thank you! I'm glad you liked it~

[gonrie]

Loved it. *fav*

[missingairmail]

*laugh* I didn't know you could favourite things on livejournal, but thanks nonetheless. *smile*

[transient_words]

This is well-written and entertaining. Personally, I am rather fond of this writing style: it is detailed, vivid and does a good job at capturing the characters' emotions. You did an excellent job describing the characters’ facials expression, using effective vocabulary to make me imagine it. The short sentences enhance the ficlet by adding liveliness to it; it really fits that nearly quirky - the angst, though subtle, is there - atmosphere you have created. The licking off scene was hot; just the right amount of rawness and gentleness was intertwined in it. Actually, I think you have captured the entire essence of the pairing rather well: this is not overly fluffy, but it is not agonizingly dramatic either.

Forgive me if this review makes no sense and is mindless babbling, but the rainy weather makes me feel dreary and I’m not at my most eloquent. Anyway, thanks for sharing.

[missingairmail]

...when I read this, I swear I squee-jumped at least three inches off my chair. Thank you thank you so much for the review. *loves* I think the only thing better than a good SasuNaru fanfic is a good SasuNaru fanfic review.

Thanks for the beautiful comment; it's the ones like these that make me want to write more! *smiles gratefully*

awwww

[slashychick666]

it's stories like this that make me wish they actually happened so i could write about sasuke and naruto meeting up post time skip and remembering this stuff lol.
very bitter sweet sequal if you ever wanted to write one ;DDD you know just for me <3 (lmfao im kidding)
I loved it!
and i'd love a sequal too..ill pay you in photoshopped images :D

Re: awwww

[missingairmail]

*laughs* I can only imagine the fun Kishimoto would have drawing Naruto's expression and the fangirls'/fanboys' reaction to the scene. As if the SasuSai wasn't enough! *laughs*
Hmm....photoshopped images, hm? Sounds very promising. *laughs* I'll see what I can do. This sort of drabble doesn't leave much for sequelling though, but nonetheless, a writer is always up for a challenge, no?
Thanks for the comment. *smile*

Re: awwww

[slashychick666]

i spelled sequel wrong every-single-time
wow
*feels dumb*
lol

Re: awwww

[missingairmail]

Oh, it's fine. I make a lot of spelling mistakes too. Firefox has this new spell-check option and it helps a lot (Does that count as cheating? *laughs nervously*).

[afterburn]

Heh, ramen has a purpose besides eating? That was great! Loved it~

[missingairmail]

*laughs* Sasuke always knows how to incorporate everyday things into his obsession with Naruto, no? Thanks for the comment! I'm glad you enjoyed it.