Happy Poetry

[mistiewatkins]

THis week on poetrythursday, the prompt was write a humurous poem. Instead of doing that I revised my poem from last week, and I must say I'm becoming more and more happy with this poem the more that I work with it. Let me know what you think

Comments

[irishnutt]

That is a much better ending, and I love the addition of "ripples in a baptismal pool." This is getting better and better!

You know, it has almost the shape of a sonnet. Doing one draft as a sonnet, thinking about the rhythm and line length more than rhyme, might really help you shape and polish this.

Good job revising, sis.

[mistiewatkins]

Thanks Amy. I have to say that the "ripples in a baptismal pool" was a suggestion of a girl in my creative writing class. I thought it worked really well.

[coffeenut]

I miss the part of your Mom giving you a hymnal for your birthday!

[anonymous]

I think you added the line about Buhdda and Shiva at the end since you last read me this poem. I love the references from my childhood especially the "Walking softly in the sanctuary," and "Sweet as water from a rock."

Great poem!

Ryan

[mistiewatkins]

Thanks Ryan.