dw - the end of east

[momentmusical]

Today is Rose Tyler’s nineteenth birthday. She has the sticky taste of mango on her lips, a new pearl bracelet on her wrist, and an equally-recent tear in her cotton frock. She is also not-quite halfway up the banyan tree in the courtyard of her home.

A veil of dappled shadow from the canopy above falls over her upturned face. The mid-

Comments

[asahifirsa]

Oh... you had me in tears there, well, nearly in tears because I'm at work and can't really cry here. It's beautiful. This has been memorized. In the second to last paragraph, there's a typo that threw me a bit, other than that it's perfect.

[momentmusical]

Thank you so much ♥ ! I'm happy to hear that you enjoyed reading it, and I'm so sorry I nearly made you cry at work :(.

Eeek. I'm sorry about the typo! I'm just awful at proofreading my own work at times XD. Thanks for pointing it out to me, and it's been fixed!

[blackadder72]

There are few words I can come up with to describe how much I enjoyed this story. It is by far one of the most sensual stories in that all of my senses were so engaged. I felt like I could smell the spice and the flowers and the fruit. I could see the vibrant colors and even feel the heat. I loved that we saw things like snapshots; events and feelings that were linear in Rose's life but still having that kind of non-linear feel with John. Pretty much the essence of anyone who travels with the Doctor and yet in this alternate universe, it feels both familiar and new.

Sometimes my insomnia works out for the best. Especially when I get to read stories like this. If this is you getting carried away, do it more often. Excellent work!

[momentmusical]

Oh, oh oh. *blushes and twirls on the spot* Thank you so much! I'm so glad to hear that you could sense so much from this fic. I completely agree that anyone who travels with the Doctor would get that feeling of non-linear, timey-wimey ness, and to hear that you could feel that still in this fic makes me so, so glad :D.

Though I'm glad it lead you to read my fic, I hope your insomnia gets better, hun! ♥ ♥.

[teruel_a_witch]

*iz basking in thic fic*I've reread it today and it's even better now, I really love this, it's so rich and wonderful and symbolic and ambiguous, gorgeous imagery and my only nitpick is that I want it to be longer because I want MOAR John and Rose:P XD

[momentmusical]

YAAAY for rereading!! :D :D I'm happy to hear that it only got better!

I was actually sooo worried about the length... I edited it as much as I could to get it shorter, but the word count just wouldn't budge XD. But to hear that you wanted more makes me glad that I didn't cut out too much! *dances*

[teruel_a_witch]

The longer the fic the better, especially if we don't get a sequel and I'm kinda fond of this little world ;)
I edited it as much as I could to get it shorter, but the word count just wouldn't budge
Hey,hey,hey, no matter how little you cut it was too much, don't say me you did cut some Rose/John scenes? :o

[quean_of_swords]

Oh, that was incredibly beautiful. ♥

[momentmusical]

Thank you so, so much! ♥ ♥

[sunnytyler001]

Waw! Beautiful!!!

[momentmusical]

:D Thank you! I'm glad you liked it ♥.